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3B English home learning – Friday 5th June Entrepreneur Week.

Wow . . . look what we have just received.

It’s your turn to write a persuasive letter.

36 responses to “3B English home learning – Friday 5th June Entrepreneur Week.”

  1. Serina I.

    Serina I
    Broad heath
    Hanford close
    CV6 5DP

    5 th June 2020

    Dear Alan Sugar,

    My name is serina Ismail, I am a student from broad heath primary school class 3B. I am writing to you this letter to persuade you to create my own shop.

    I make the most delicious homemade sandwiches with organic ingredients. First of all I make a healthy whole wheat bread with sourdough, a home made scrumptious vegetarian organic cheese topped with my fresh organic green lettuce plucked from my beautiful garden, and also a fresh juicy organic cucumber plucked from my garden as well. The secret is my best ever own delicious sauce made from Tahina which is a dense paste made from crushed sesame seeds. Tahina sauce is a mixture of Tahina paste, garlic, lemon juice, and water. this traditional sauce is served in Arab countries. This sauce gives my sandwiches the perfect taste of the combination between the modernity and the traditional.

    Without a doubt the shop will have a great popularity. It will attract different people from different nationality.

    Your sincerely

    Serina I

    1. Mrs A Patel

      Super letter Serina. You introduced yourself well to Mr. Alan Sugar and used persuasive language in your letter.
      Why do we use paragraphs when we are writing letter?

      1. Serina I.

        paragraphs are used to introduce a new section of information

  2. Safa M.

    Sir Alan Sugar
    Amshold house,
    Golden Hill,
    Loughton,
    1G10 2RW

    Safa
    Year 3,
    Broad Heath Primary School
    9 Hanford CL,
    Coventry
    CV6 5TL

    Dear Alan Sugar,
    I am writing to tell you that i am very convinced that i am ready to open many sandwich shops around the UK, all selling my delicious,yet healthy meals.

    Firstly, the ingredients of my sandwiches are all fresh and full of organic vegetables. The bread is also freshly home-made and with no unnecessary chemicals. Secondly, the prices are cheap making people want to buy them. Furthermore, anyone who buys a sandwich is given a free piece of fruit and a free cup of freshly made cranberry juice. For instance the more cheaper the sandwich the more people will buy them.

    You should pick my sandwich as it is all full of healthy and balanced meals, including fresh fruit and cranberry juice. My shop is different to the rest as the vegetables are grown in the best local farm and the bread will be made in the shop itself. My shop will make money as it is more cheaper making more people want to visit and buy them.

    As you can see, my shop is very different yet useful for a successful business. I am looking forward to hear from you again

    Yours Sincerely,
    Safa
    3 Blue

    1. Mrs Khaliq

      Super letter Safa. Are the addresses in the correct place?
      What are the key features of a letter?

    2. Mrs A Patel

      Used persuasive language well in your letter Safa. Well done.

  3. Faizan R.

    Year 3 student
    Broad Heath Primary School
    9 Handfordshire
    Coventry
    CV6 5TL

    Sir Alan Sugar
    Amshold House,
    Golding Hill ,
    Loughton,
    England
    IG 10 2RW

    Dear Sir Alan Sugar,
    I am responding to your recent letter to my school, I am a year 3 student, my name is Faizan and my idea is for a sandwich bar called ‘ Faizan sandwich bar.’ It has healthy sandwiches to help young and old people to enjoy sandwiches which they can mix and make, my business evolves using a ingredients on Eatwell plate to introduce this to young and old , the other plus thing is 10% of my profit will go to NHS to help them with a best children and adults. I will use fresh products locally found cheese , farm vegetables tomato , lettuce, onion, cucumber , meat , is also farmed with up most animal. Evidence shows a healthy start a well balanced sandwich bar can give a child and adult to a productive morning to lunch . In belief this sandwich bar is undoubtedly a winning business,I am a bright hard working pupil , with bright ideas can succeed in any business even yours Sir Alan Sugar, thank you for reading this ,
    Yours sincerely
    Faizan 3 Blue

    1. Mrs Khaliq

      Great work Faizan! What are the features of a formal letter?

      1. Faizan R.

        Formal letters are written for official or professional communication.

  4. Brooke M.

    I am going to do mine on paper and send a picture.

    1. Mrs A Patel

      Good girl Brooke.
      Make sure you use persuasive language.

  5. Aayan M.

    Year 3 students
    Broad heath primary school
    9 Hanford CL,
    Coventry
    CV6 5TL
    5/6/20

    Sir Alan Sugar
    Amshold House,
    Goldings Hill,
    Laughton,
    England,
    IG10 2RW

    Dear Sir Alan Sugar,

    I would like to tell you about my business which is running really well. I have a small sandwich shop called Healthy is Wealthy Sandwich Shop. We specialize in healthy, nutritious and delicious sandwiches. All our ingredients are from the local farms where everything is fresh and organic. Together we both profit because business is booming through the roof. I have quite a large order from these local farms that always deliver on time. I also know that these farms can supply a lot more and together we can profit from the expansion from my business.

    I have a high demand from our costumer’s whose queue literally go round into the next street. I have even had to hire more staff to manage with the high demand of costumer’s. Because off all the costumer’s we are getting, have had to open the shop for longer opening times.

    I have a strict policy on hygiene. I supply uniforms for my staff which gets washed everyday. All my staff wears gloves, hats, masks and disposable aprons. Wearing this equipment is really attracting our customers as we show that hygiene and cleanliness as our top priorities.

    The thing that makes this company different is I research on healthy food options and recipes. We turn these recipes into our own design and use our own special sources. We weigh calories carefully to ensure that our customers receive a tasty healthy nutritious yet filling sandwich only found at Healthy is Wealthy Sandwich shop.

    I believe if we were to expand and create a chain of shops, it would be very profitable for both of us and also of the local farms that supply to us.

    The demand is there already because of the business I am getting. If we think on a larger scale, Brittan is getting healthy conscious and this is what’s going to help this company grow. We supply to the needs of the nation.

    I would like to arrange a meeting to explain my plans for expansion and my business proposal in more detail.

    I await for your response

    Yours thankfully

    Aayan

    1. Mrs Khaliq

      WOW another amazing letter! Lord Sugar will be impressed. What are the features of a formal letter?

    2. Mrs A Patel

      Well done Aayan. You have used persuasive language in your letter.

    3. Mrs A Patel

      So your business is running really well Aayan. Can we have a partnership In your business? 😊

  6. Jasmine M.

    Jasmine
    Broad Heath Primary School
    Hanford Close
    Coventry
    CV6 5TL

    Sir Alan Sugar
    Amshold House
    Goldings Hill
    Loughton
    IG 10 2RW

    05th June 2020

    Dear Sir Alan Sugar

    I am a student from Broad Heath Primary School, currently in Class 3 blue. After extensive market research I have produced a business idea which I believe that we would both benefit from.
    The name of the business is “It’s Sandwich Time”. The sandwiches being sold would be of a very high quality and filled with the most fresh fillings available such as Cheese, Chicken tikka, ham, prawns and salad.( I have enclosed a menu for your attention).

    Why I would believe that this sandwich and baguette type business is going to be successful is because I have left the sandwich making decision to the customer. The customer can pick and choose their own breads and fillings. This is a unique part of the business and would give the customer greater choice rather than stick to fillings that are common.
    Also an imperative part to the business is price. My aim is to make these sandwiches affordable for everyone so that everyone has the ability to eat and not skip a meal because of affordability. I have introduced a meal package where the customer can pick and choose 3 fillings a drink of their own choice and a bag of crisps and a Sweet item such as vanilla slices or a large Cookie, as stated in the menu. This will appeal to many.

    I further would be very grateful if we could meet in person at a time that is most convenient to you to discuss this wonderful business opportunity and to explain ways of how we can make this business a Global Franchise.

    I look forward to your reply

    Yours Sincerely

    Miss. Jasmine

    1. Mrs Khaliq

      Oh WOW Jasmine! You make me so proud. What an amazing letter. 5 Dojo points.
      Can you tell me the key features of a formal letter?

    2. Mrs A Patel

      Well done Jasmine. You are telling Lord Sugar about your research and business ideas. I am looking forward to seeing you being a junior apprentice.

  7. Lillie S.

    I have wrote my letter in my homework book.

    Lillie Mae,
    Broad Heath Primary School,
    9 Hanford Close,
    Coventry,
    CV6 5DP

    Sir Alan Sugar,
    Amshold House,
    Gouldlings Hill,
    Loughton,
    England,
    1G10 2RW

    Dear Sir Alan Sugar,
    Lillie’s Loveliest Lunches is the best because my sandwiches are the best in town! I only use freshly baked bread, the juiciest meats and the freshest, locally sourced salad and vegetables. My sandwiches are made fresh everyday by the most talented sandwich makers ever!
    My shop is different to others because the ingredients I use I grow myself, which makes my sandwiches unique.
    My shop will make money because I have lots of special offers like meal deals. If you buy a sandwich you can get a drink, crisps and a chocolate bar for £1 extra. My shop also sells breakfast for people who go to work early. I also have healthy options and sell a range of takeaway drinks.

    Yours sincerely,
    Lillie Mae.

    1. Mrs Khaliq

      Super letter Lillie.
      Can you tell me the key features of a formal letter?

      1. Jasmine M.

        Clearness
        Correctness
        Completeness
        Conciseness
        Attractiveness
        Coherence
        Courtesy
        Creativeness
        These are all the main features of a formal letter.

        1. Mrs Khaliq

          Try this again. A feature includes having your address in the right-hand corner. What else did you have to include in your letter?

  8. Azaan H.

    Mr Azaan
    Broad Heath Primary School
    Hanford Close
    Coventry
    CV6 5TL

    05th June 2020

    Sir Alan Sugar
    Amshold House
    Goldings Hill
    Loughton
    England
    IG10 2RW

    Dear Mr Sugar,

    My name is Azaan and I am in 3blue. This week is entrepreneur week at Broad Heath Primary school. I have designed a sandwich shop. My logo is a picture of a scrumptious filled sandwich. The slogan is a “Love Foods ” and my shop is called “The Sandwich Hut”. I will be selling all varieties of sandwich fillers for example halal meat, vegetarian and vegan sandwiches. The bread 🍞 will be freshly baked daily. There will be hot and cold sandwiches on offer but also various healthy snacks.
    Thank you for this opportunity and I hope to hear from you soon.
    Yours Sincerely
    Azaan

    1. Mrs Khaliq

      Super letter Azaan.
      Can you tell me the features of a formal letter?

  9. Alena I.

    Aleena
    Broad Heath primary school
    Hanford close
    Coventry
    CV6 5Tl
    05.06.20
    Dear Alan sugar
    I am writing this letter to you because in 3B we are learning about entrepreneurs and I am interested in opening a sandwich shop since you own one I decided to ask you for advice what advice would you give to newcomer’s I. Any advice would help.
    Many thanks I am looking forward to your reply
    Yours sincearly
    Aleena

    1. Mrs A Patel

      Wow Aleena, you wrote a very clear letter.
      I am sure Alan Sugar will be impressed if he read your letter.
      Next time use a paragraphs in your letter.

  10. Zakariya K.

    Zakariya k
    Broad Heath
    Handford Close
    Coventry
    CV6 5DP

    Dear Alan Sugar
    My name is Zakariya k. I am writing to inform you that I am interested in opening up a sandwich bar. It will be the most unique Sandwich shop.I will use the finest home grown organic produce.My sandwiches will cater for vegetarians, meat lovers, vegans, gluten free and halal, so no one misses out. We will bake freshly made bread daily to satisfy our customers. They will have an option to choose from a variety of breads. My plan is to make a comfy place with sofas, arm chairs and books scattered for people to read while they eat. The walls will be painted with rainbow colours so people will find it colourful and cheery. I will provide seating outside aswell for the summer. I believe my shop will make lots of money because they will be tasty, delicious and mouth watering. Therefore,they will always come back for more. I want to put an asian twist to my food to spice it up for spice lovers. I understand I might have a few problems to begin with because it’s my first business, but hopefully you can see it is promising. Hope to hear from you soon.
    Your sincerely
    Zakariya k

    1. Mrs Khaliq

      Super letter Zak! Very persuasive. Can you separate this letter using paragraphs?

    2. Mrs A Patel

      Can I please come to your sandwich bar Zakariya?
      Your letter is very impressive. Well done.

      1. Zakariya K.

        Yes you can Mrs Patel. What sandwich shall I make for you?

  11. Zakariah D.

    Mr Zakariah
    Broad Heath Primary School,
    Hanford Close,
    Coventry,
    CV6 5TL,
    05/06/20
    Sir Alan Sugar
    Amshold House
    Goldings Hill
    Loughton
    England
    IG10 2 RW
    Dear Mr Sugar,
    I’m a student of 3 Blue, this week we have been studying entrepreneur week, and I feel that I have had the opportunity to produce an amazing business idea. Which I’m certain you will be very impressed with and would not like to miss being a part of.
    First of all I have chosen a name and with your approval I feel that it will become a household name very quickly. Dean’s Delhi Deli it will be a delicatessen with a twist towards Asian food that will revolutionise the sandwich business by introducing mouthwatering, eye opening new exotic flavours which will appeal to everyone. We will be open 24 hours a day, bake fresh bread hourly, use the freshest ingredients, have halal, vegetarian and vegan options, with an emphasis on healthy food.
    I hope to have branches in all major airports and shopping malls throughout England within 12 months, within 2 years expanding into Europe and by the 3rd year worldwide. In addition to sandwiches and baguettes we will offer Asian street food using lots of spices adding flavours that will both smell and taste lovely. I also hope to offer coffee and chai (tea) in the authentic Asian style, with snacks both sweet and savoury, we have looked into using recyclable materials for all our products.
    I have been to many local malls with samples of our products and 74% of people have said that our food tastes beautiful with lovely aromas. They also liked our drinks and packaging we sold all the stock from our stall within 3 hours and had to replenish which sold out once again, but luckily we had anticipated a good response and were one step ahead of the demand.
    It would be a privilege if I could meet you in person to discuss my business plan, which you will hopefully approve and with your advice I’m certain we can be better than all our competitors. I’ve enclosed all my details in the attached letter and I will also be sending by courier samples of our products which they will serve to you and your board, thank you for taking the time to listen to me.
    Yours Sincerely
    Mr Zakariah

    1. Mrs Khaliq

      What an amazing letter Zak! I’m sure you have persuaded Sir Alan Sugar that you have a fantastic business opportunity for him! Is this a formal or informal letter? How did you know which one to write? What key features did you have to remember?

    2. Mrs A Patel

      You remembered the features of the letter and I am pleased that you have used paragraphs Zakariah.
      Well done!

  12. Mrs A Patel

    Well done Gufran. You have used lots of describing words in your letter.
    How would you end your letter as you are persuading Mr. Alan Sugar to help you set up your shop.

  13. Gufran E.

    Gufran
    Broad heath school
    Hanford close
    CV6 5DP

    Dear Alan ,
    I have the greatest sandwiches of all time . It has a delicious taste of toast toasted to perfection and has a satisfying taste to it . It is a mouth watering scrumptious sandwich that is just right and splendid .

    It is made with light , soft , mouth watering toast and warm , delicious and tasty cheese that is sprinkled with delight and that you can’t resist . It also has lettuce that has a nice crunch and tomatoes to finish it of .

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