4B – Wednesday 20th May – Home Learning – English

Today is your first draft of your Tudor information text. Don’t panic! You should have done most of the work. Last week, you should have written your introduction, the main paragraphs and this week you have drawn pictures with captions. If you have kept up with all of this, all you need to do now is put it all together into one text. When you are doing this, please look at any feedback you have been given and try to improve it where you can.

Please don’t spend too much time on the presentation today, as this is a first draft. After you have done this, I will give you some feedback in order to improve your work. Tomorrow, you will need to action this feedback and present the text in best as your final piece.

Here are the blogs you might need to look back on to find your work and remember what you did:
INTRODUCTION: https://www.broadheath.coventry.sch.uk/4b-wednesday-13th-may-home-learning-english/
TUDOR MEDICINE: https://www.broadheath.coventry.sch.uk/4b-thursday-14th-may-home-learning-english/
MAIN PARAGRAPHS: https://www.broadheath.coventry.sch.uk/4b-friday-15th-may-home-learning-english/
CAPTIONS: https://www.broadheath.coventry.sch.uk/?p=143930&preview=true

Here are the 2 example texts we looked at at the beginning of last week. Remember, you need to be including all the features of an information text

This image has an empty alt attribute; its file name is 3-2.jpg

This image has an empty alt attribute; its file name is 4-2.jpg

21 thoughts on “4B – Wednesday 20th May – Home Learning – English

  1. Tudor food:
    In the Tudor times people did not have fridges or freezers to store their food in. The rich drank wine and people who lived near the river ate a lot of fish. People also ate different animals such a deer, pigs and oxen. They ate a lot of fruit and vegetables. Bread was eaten quite often but bread was different for the rich and the poor.
    They did not drink a lot of water as it would be polluted, (have) harmful bacteria and was filthy so that is why people drank wine. Water was considered as unhealthy because the sewage were (was) not clean. Most people drank ale but the rich drank wine because they could afford it and it was from Europe. They did not drink hot drinks and milk was for the lower class.

  2. Tudor sports
    Tudor had to played indoors tennis
    If they were playing football it could be kick or carried.
    Everyone was allowed to tackle they could punch in the face and kick.
    In the tudor time they used (to) like playing board games like chest and the most popular game was nine men Morris that was the most popular game in tudor age (not needed as it is repetitive).
    Tudor tennis racket were made out of wood and strung with sheep gut.

    • A few corrections in brackets, but this is much better than the other day. The main thing you need to remember is all these sentences link so no need to start a new line fore each fact please.

  3. Anne Boleyn was He Catherine Parr was Henry’s fifth wife. Catherine Parr was born in 1512. Catherine and Henry VIII married on 12th July 1543.
    After Henry died and Catherine Parr survived.nry’s second wife after Catherine of Aragon.

  4. Tudor sports
    The Tudor version of tennis was played indoors with human hair.
    There was no end to the number of players. Also the ball could be thrown, kicked or carried. Anyone was allowed to tackle, punch and trip there opponent. The Tudors liked to play cards and number games like chess. People in the lower classes played games like football.
    Tudor medicines
    Tudor medicine mostly consisted of herbal remedies. Poor Tudors would get basic health care from their own family members. Also the rich would get a lot of treatment. Herbal remedies were often known as ‘simples’ because most Tudor women would have known how to make them and it would be easy. The Tudors didn’t know about antibiotics.
    Tudor foods
    Poor people ate food like bread and vegetable and rich people ate food like expensive meat. Herbs were mostly used for a type of flavour. Honey was used to sweeten food and drinks. Rich people would use wine glasses and poor people would use wooden goblets.
    Henry VIII and his 6 wife’s.
    Catherine of Aragon was born in Madrid and was married to Arthur Tudor. When Arthur died and Henry VIII became King of England, Catherine of Aragon married Henry VIII.
    Anne Boleyn was Henry’s second wife after Catherine of Aragon. Did you know she didn’t have her sixth finger and no-one actually knows when she was born. ?
    Jane Seymour was Henry’s third wife. Jane Seymour was born in about 1508. Henry married Jane Seymour at the Palace of Whitehall in London and it was just 11 days after Anne Boleyn was beheaded.
    Catherine Howard was Henry’s fourth wife. Catherine’s first name was spelt in several different ways. Catherine Howard was born in the 1500. Henry married Catherine. The ceremony took place on 28th July 1540.
    Catherine Parr was Henry’s fifth wife. Catherine Parr was born in 1512. Catherine and Henry VIII married on 12th July 1543.
    After Henry died and Catherine Parr survived.
    Caption
    Rich Tudors wore nice clothes and clean clothes but poor Tudors wore dirty clothes.

    • There are some really good facts here Danyaal so well done with your research.
      The main issue with your work is the sentences openers. Almost all sentences start with a noun or noun phrase. I have made them bold so you can see. This does not demonstrate GD writing which we know you can do.
      You need to use fronted adverbial and subordination more often… not all the time, but more than you do.
      Please can you rewrite one sentence from each paragraph to start with a fronted adverbial.
      For example:
      Poor people ate food like bread and vegetable and rich people ate food like expensive meat.
      change to:
      Unlike the rich who would eat lots of expensive meat, the poor ate brad and vegetables.

Leave a Reply