Coming to England Scripts and Performances

During Literary Figures Week, 5 Blue have been writing their own scripts for a scene from the book, Coming to England by Floella Benjamin. 

The scene they are performing is when the children’s parents announce that they are coming to England and that the children will be staying with their Godparents until they are called for. 

Task:

To write an evaluation of our Coming To England performances

Your evaluation must include: 

  • A good thing about the play.
  • How they could make their performance even better?
  • What the best parts were.
  • Which parts you would improve and how you would do this?
  • Was the plot predictable? 
  • What acting techniques could you see? 
  • Were the characters realistic and were the actors consistently in character?
  • Did the characters show good movement?

I would like every person to comment on these aspects for every group.

Well done 5 Blue! I have been super impressed with your play scripts and I hope you enjoyed this activity.

Miss Starkey ⭐️

 




54 thoughts on “Coming to England Scripts and Performances

  1. Well done Year 5, great evaluations. It makes us happy to know you have enjoyed reading the book and acting out certain parts from it. 👍🏽🙂🙂🙂

  2. Coming to England group1
    I think that group one was clear because you know what they are saying.To
    make it is better you would do more emotions. I liked it all so I didn’t have a
    best part because it was all good.

    Mahammad group
    I think that group one was clear because you know what they are saying.To
    make it is better you would do more emotions. I liked it all so I didn’t have a
    best part because it was all good.

    Mahammad group
    I think that group one was clear because you know what they are saying.To
    make it is better you would do more emotions. I liked it all so I didn’t have a
    best part because it was all good.

    Mahammad group
    I think that group one was clear because you know what they are saying.To
    make it is better you would do more emotions. I liked it all so I didn’t have a
    best part because it was all good.

    Mahammad group
    I think that group one was clear because you know what they are saying.To
    make it is better you would do more emotions. I liked it all so I didn’t have a
    best part because it was all good.

  3. A good thing about the plays was everyone tried their best.
    They could make their performance better by moving about a bit more and trying not to laugh.
    I enjoyed reading this book and acting out my part.

  4. group 1:
    They played loud and clearly.
    To improve there performance they could have looked at the audience/camera abit more.
    best part was when dardi was leaving and they were holding his leg.
    I would change the ending. They could havr built up more of a ending.
    The plot was predictable.
    No.
    Yes.

    play2:
    They were also loud and clear.
    Mahamid could have spoke more.
    The best part was when Mohamad and Humza trip over.
    I would change the dad into a boy.

  5. A good thing about all the plays was that everyone enjoyed the book and really enjoyed acting out the parts.
    They could make their performances better by not being shy and giggling. Also to really get into the part of the character and really feel what that character is feeling.
    The best parts were when Lester started to cry in Humairahs group and when they persuaded Dardie not to leave for England.
    The parts that could be improved could be in Safas group where Safa was making the food and the other children were laughing. If your parents were about to leave you would not be laughing.
    Yes the plot was predictable as I knew what was going on and it was easy to follow.
    The acting techniques I could see was facial expressions, loud voices, sadness, when they were excited and when they were not.mAlso some children took their parts really seriously.
    Some of the children were really realistic and took their parts really seriously however their was some children that were laughing and this wasn’t good.
    The characters showed good movement and used majority of their spaces really well.
    I enjoyed reading this book and learning what it would be like to come from another country and settle into a country where you know nothing about it.
    Thank you Miss Satrkey and Ms Janjua

  6. group 2 evaluation:

    1.the good thing about there group is that they had body language and it was a bit funny.they also had good actions for there stage directions. the last thing i think was good about theres is good communication and worked as a team.

    2.the thing i think they need improving on is using more actions and emotions such as humza i think had no facial expressions.

    3. the best part of theres is them trying to stop dardie and marmie from going to england.

    4. the techniques i could see are actions emotions and flashback.it wasnt predictable which made the watcher didnt know about what was going to happen next.the characters have got good movement

    group 3:

    a good thing about the play was they had actions and emotions as well as only having one or none which they also had speech and body language to tell another person if they forgot their part of what to do.
    they can make there video even better by making it a bit longer

  7. 1.is good about the play that is realistic
    2.we could make our performance even better with better actions.
    3.The best part from my video I think it was when marmie started to cry.
    4.From my video I would improve the part when I came ‘Home’ to be more sad.
    5.Yes I think the plot was predictable.
    6.I can see in a video a techniques that they use chairs to make something like a sofa.
    7.Yes, I think the characters were realistic and yes, I think the actors were consistently in character.
    8.Yes, I think the characters did show good movement.

  8. A good thing about humzas play is they used alot of actions in there play.they could improve by making there play a little bit longer.the best part of there play was at the end when they were begging Marmie not to go.I would improve there play by making it longer and more louder.I thing the play was predictable.The acting i could see they were relaxing when they were watching the TV.I think that the characters were not realistic.I think that the characters showed a lot of movement.
    A good thing about Riyads play is that they made it intresting even at the start.They could improve by making it longer than 25 seconds.The best part of the play was when they used actions at the start.I would improve by making it longer.The plot was unpredictable.I could see techniques with there hands.The characters were not consistent.The characters did not show good movement.

  9. The play i liked was Leona’s video because there actions were good.
    They can improve by saying a bit more clear and saying it louder.
    The best part was when Hamzah n said stop asking questions. They could improve by when Marmie was going to cry i would make crying sounds.I think it was predictable because they left the cliff hanging.I could see emotions and some acting going on. I could see that there were movements and Loud speech.I think that the realistic characters were a tiny bit in character.They showed alot of movement and emotion.

  10. My group were really good but we can improve it by speaking louder and the poeple who were in my group are sunnaf,leena,richard,jeremi,luzia,.
    my moive 8
    This imovie was ok they coud improve it by making the video longer havind a louder voice if you had that it will even better but overall it is really good.
    Mahammad Gs group
    This group was kind of funny i think this play script is proapbly the best play script to improve it could of been in deatil and lots of more stage dicertion. overall it is a really good and amzaing.

    • Some nice ideas Sunnaf- have you answered all of the questions which I set? Take care- there are a couple of spelling mistakes. Well done, some lovely comments.

  11. Group 4 Evaluation
    has got some great actions and organized very neatly.
    They had some expression but could they look like they are really sad.
    The best part was when is the synopsis which has powerful verbs
    The actions technique i liked was when they were saying goodbye

  12. Group 1 Evaluation:

    1.The good thing about the first group was that they had a lot of emotions.
    2. They could have made there performance better by having more actions.
    3. The best part was when they grabbed dadie legs when dadie was about go and picked up his luggage.
    4. I think they could have turn there face to there audience and not the back and i could improve this by turn there face to the audience.
    5. The plot was predictable because they explained it and they also grabbed dadie leg at the end.
    6. The technique that i could see was when they had a lot of emotions and actions.
    7. The characters and actors were realistic because they had a lot of emotions and actions.
    8. Yes all of the characters showed good movements because they grabbed dardies leg at the end.

  13. The play i like is Leona’s because they had clear voices.They can make their play by trying not to laugh in between.The best part about their play was how their narrator was making us think what will happen next.I think they can improve by using more actions when any emotions come up like sad, happy and angry.I think it is predictable because they left cliff hangers.The acting techniques i could see was actions and emotion.The characters were not realistic because there was not that much actions and the characters were a bit in character.They showed a bit of movement.

  14. Humza’s group could improve by having more bits in their video.the thing that was good about their video was that they had actions and they were clear. My favourite part of the act was when they grabbed Marmie and Dardie’s legs. The plot was unpredictable.The acting techniques I could see was body language and facial expressions.The characters were consistently in character.Also they showed good movement in their acting.

    Mustafa’s group could improve by having more actions in. The good thing about their play was that they had narration. The best parts were when Dardie walked into the room and when Dardie tells them his news. I would improve the end by having more actions in. The plot was unpredictable. The acting techniques I could see whas facial expressions. Most of them were consistent with their characters. The characters had a little movement.

    Riyad’s group could improve by making the video longer. A good thing about Riyad’s play was that they used actions. The best parts were when the children were playing with each other and when Dardie came in. I would improve by adding a bit more actions and expressions in. The plot was unpredictable. The acting techniques I could see was facial expressions. The characters were not consistent. The characters did not show good movement.

  15. the first group had:
    loud voices
    clear voices
    you could tell that they put lots of effort into their play
    to improve they could show more movement
    not have their backs to the camera

    the 2 group had :
    loud clear voices
    lots of movement
    no backs to the camera
    to improve they could:
    a bit more in their role

    group 3 had:
    loud voices
    to improve the could :
    use more expression

    group 4 used :
    loud voices
    to improve :
    they could stop smiling when it is a sad part in the play

    group 5 used:
    expression
    l0oud voices
    no backs to the camera
    to improve they could use body movement

  16. First group was good but they could of improved by speaking louder and more clearer also have a bit more expression when they were talking.It was quite quick the group could of made it a bit longer and better.

    Second group [my group] was good but i think we could of improved by making it better by having more expression and to try not to smile i think it could be bit by bit and not that many words at once also we could of spoke more louder.

    Third group was good but they definitely need to make it longer also it was quite hard to hear them i think they could been more louder instead of quiet.They were making it too quick by talking really fast i was confusing for me to know what they were saying.And they could of did more actions just to make it better and improve it.

    Fourth group was too long but they had clear voices and expression which was good.To improve they could made the video a bit shorter because if it too long it can be a bit boring.Also i think the character’s were good saying their lines.

    Last group was good their volume was perfect and their expressions as well were good to improve when they were doing actions they were smiling also in my opinion they could of did more actions to make it better and not boring.They could of improved it by making it a tiny bit shorter.

  17. 1} Group 1
    A good thing about this play was that they had clear and loud voices .They could make there play better by not having there backs to the camera .The good parts were that they had good acting skills and learnt there parts of by heart .I would improve it by having a bit more lines to some of the parts .
    2}Group 2
    A good thing about this play is that that they had loud voices to make sure the reader could hear them speaking.They could improve by having a bit more detail in there lines .
    3] Group 3
    A good thing about this play was they had loud voices .
    To improve this play they could use a bit more of expression.
    4] Group 4
    A good thing about this performance was they used a lot expression like when they were skipping back from school but in some places they didn’t really use that much expression .
    5]Group 5
    A good thing about this group is that they used a lot of clear voices .To improve this play they could use the right face for the the right time

  18. i didn’t get to watch my group but they can improve by speeking louder.the people in my group were leena sunnaf jeremi luiza and Richered . the foloed by my book {it was a little chaned.}

    kimberlys group was good but they could improve by adding some parts in. what they did good was they inclodid every one and there voice was clear.

    Aleenas group was good but they could improve it by some more actions .what they did good was they spoke very clearly.

    Safas group was good but they could improve by not changing to the I.C.T room.what was good was that they incloded everyone.

    medinas group was good but could improve by puting in leona more. what was good was that you incloded every one else.

    by leena.n

  19. Group 1 evaluation
    One good thing about their play was that they used body actions.
    One thing that could be improved is their volume.
    In my opinion the best part was when they all were holding Richard’s legs.
    This plot was predictable.
    An acting technique I could see was miming.
    The characters were realistic and were consistently in character.
    The characters had very good movement in my opinion.

    Muhammad G’s group Evaluation
    One good thing about their play was they used lots of emotions.
    One thing that that could be improved is that you couldn’t tell who was who .
    The best part is that they grabbed their legs even though they could of banged their heads or been stepped on and it was such a tight space.
    This plot wasn’t predictable which is one of the things that made it good and stand out.
    One acting technique I saw was emotions and body language they also had good stage directions.
    The characters were realistic and consistently in character.
    The characters had very good movement.

    • Well done Ayaan! A lovely response and all the comments are true and written nicely. Why do you think the plot may have been predictable? I am glad you enjoyed some of the performances- well done! :)

  20. i like kimberly,humza,zara h, mohammed g and umaiyah group it was amazing and funny and i enjoy the video i like it. they could improve by making even funnier. the emotion comes up sad and mad.it was amazing on the parts.theydid realy good. well done i hope you enjoy.

    • Barkad, a lovely response but you are missing your capital letters! Remind me…which words need capital letters? I am glad you enjoyed watching the video.

  21. its got funny part
    by making it even funnier
    when they got the parents legs
    it will make good and have a good perfomance
    it was good in most parts
    stage directions and spech and expresion
    they werent realistic
    they did really good actions

  22. Some great work here 5B. It was really interesting to see how you interpreted the scene similarly and yet there was a fair few differences too. Did you enjoy this activity? There have been some brilliant comments so far. Well done!

  23. Drama group
    1.I liked Drama group because they showed there character
    2.They could make there performance better if they made it clearer
    3.The best parts were when Dardie and Marmie pretended to leave

  24. In everyplay is a very part and very well
    Some of the children Spoke clearly and some children needed to speck up Also some children looked nervous and this is called stage fright.
    They could make their performance better by speaking up and not laughing.
    I enjoyed watching my part because it helped me with my speaking as I find speaking English difficult.
    No the plot was not predictable because there was something new happening every time
    I could see stage direction and each actor speaking separately.
    I think everyone acted really well and everyone enjoyed the story.
    I think some of the characters showed good movement and I especially liked Kimberley because she was loud.
    I liked this story and I liked to act it out.
    Thank you Miss Starkey and Ms Janjua

    • Well done Luiza! A nice response :) Well done for commenting on stage fright! Did you find acting scary? I am glad you found this activity useful- I thought you did very well indeed. You are welcome, thank you for such a great response.

  25. Coming To England Group
    1.I liked coming to England group because it was clear
    2.More actions and realistic
    3.When they said goodbye 👋
    4.I would improve the time when they told the kids where they are going by saying it more clearer
    5.No the plot was not predictible
    6.I could see monologue
    7.The characters were not realistic
    8.The characters did not show good movement
    This was a good play 👍

    • Some good points but you haven’t written in full sentences as I asked. Be SPECIFIC with which bits were could and which could be improved. Not your best work.

  26. In every play everyone played a part and acted very well.
    Some of the children spoke clearly and some children needed to speak up. Also some children looked nervous and this is called stage fright. So they need to be more confident and not scared to act.
    The best part I enjoyed was when Ayub was crying.
    I would improve on certain acting parts and to do this I would help practise the part over and ever again until I got it right.
    No because at one point I thought Dardie may not leave for England.
    Yes, in Mahamad’s group they used some parts of the studio but it was very ecohy and the volume was not good.
    I could see some children had used Narration. Also some children had used freeze frame before and after a scene.
    Some of the children were in part of their character and some were not because they were either too shy or kept on giggling.
    I enjoyed this play script and I enjoyed acting out this play.

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