Week 1 Literacy Homework

This week you have been learning about stories with dilemmas and you have focused on the build up section.

You have been writing about a girl who has been playing with her kite in a forest.

Bronze – Use conjunctions to create multi-clause sentences about what the girl was doing and where she was. You may want to include the following; so, because, as, if, although. 

Silver – Use a range of sentence openers such as adverbs, adverbials and prepositional openers to describe the girl, what she was doing and where she was playing. Include adjectives too!

Gold – Write the build up section using a range of sentence structures, a range of sentence openers (adverbs. prepositions and adverbials), interesting language choices (adjectives, simile, metaphor) and ensure you proof-read before sending!! 

We look forward to reading your writing!

Year 4 Teachers

 

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  1. One morning Lucy was delightfully flying her kite across the emerald green feild.She really wanted her kite to fly.Instead of flying her kite was floating in the air like a big puffy cload!Just then her kite started to fly.Lucy watched in bewilderment as her kite soared like an eagle in the clear blue sky.
    Silver

    Early on morning Lucy decided to go out to the field and fly her kite.So she did,she walked through a narrow path as the sun glared in her eyes.Lucy finally got there.Lucy was delightfully flying her kite across the emerald green field.she was determined to get her kite to fly.Instead of flying her kite was just floating like a big puffy cload! Just then Lucy’s kite started to fly.Lucy watched her kite in bewilderment as it soared like an eagle searching for prey.suddenly Lucy’s kite was had been clutched in between the branches of a tall green tree .what was she gonna do!

  2. Early that morning Lucy decided that she would fly her kite.Lucy was determined to
    get her kite to fly by tea.”I hope it is windy enough”Lucy muttered.Just then Lucy realised the wind started to pick up and started to run like a cheetah.Then WOOSH Lucy’s kite started to fly, like an eagle searching for it’s prey.

  3. Bronz
    Lucy was running fast as lighting in the field as she was trying to make her beautiful kite fly in the clear blue sky.at last it is flying.

  4. Lucy was running fast as lighting in the field as she was trying to make her beautiful kite fly in the clear blue sky.at last it is flying.

  5. Slowly Lucy’s kite flew acros the kristal blue sky and over the lush green grass.After a while the wind stoped and the kite floted side to side down to the ground.

  6. Silver challenge
    Lucys a girl with a red kite in a meadow but there’s a problem. Lucy is determined to get one minute to play with her kite.
    Somewhere in a meadow Lucy’s kite glides in the air,however Lucy skips happy over the pointy sharp green grass.
    The lush green grass meadow with trees stand guard to capture Lucy’s kite.
    Gold challenge:
    On sunny morning Lucy rushed down the stairs to repair to fly a red ruby kite.In the meadow Lucy was playing nicely.
    Suddenly dark clouds covers the sky like a dark roof leaves fly in the air “l won’t leave you a promise”thought to herself.

  7. Silver:
    Very slowly Lucy’s kite began to fly like an eagle looking for its prey. Lucy’s kite was far up in the clear blue sky. But after a while it started to go lower down and it nearly got stuck in the tree. Lucy was so happy it did not get stuck in the tree.
    Gold:
    Lucy skipped happily across the emerald blanket of grass.Lucy was really determined to get her kite to fly before tea. She ran like lighting but her multi colored kite did not fly.So Lucy started to run.

  8. sliver challenge
    Lucy skipped across the emerald blanket of grass. She was determined to get her kite to fly in the bright blue sky. Lucy tried one … last … time and up the kite went soaring like
    an eagle searching for prey.Lucy skipped through the lush green grass happily. She was looking forward to having more wonderful adventures with her colourful kite.

  9. Lucy skipped cross the greenfield. she was playing with her kite.she was trying to make her kite fly. But then her kite was flying like a bird. Lucy hope is day wont end. then the kite got stuck in the tree.

  10. Lucy was flying her beautyiful kite it wood not fly for a long time she was very
    Sad Lucy ran faster faster. She said
    Before tea she kept. On running but the kite just didn’t fly.

  11. Lucy was trying to fly her kite through the the waving blades of grass she was determined to make her colourful vibrant kite so she sprinted like lightning across the emerald green blanket of grass one…last…pull…and whoosh it flew up into the sky like an eagle searching for prey she was happily skipping across the field flying her kite and feeling very proud of her self.

    • Naly good to see you have included similes and metaphors in your writing. It’s a one big sentence, can you tell me where can you insert full stops.

  12. Lucy sprinted happily through the lush, green and emerald blanket of grass. She was very determined to fly her red vibrant kite before teatime!!!!!
    When is this kite ever going fly? she asked herself.Suddenely a blast of wind whooshed the kite in the sky!!!!!
    Lucy closed her eyes and imagined she was like a eagle trying to hunt it’s prey down.

  13. Lucy skipped happily across the emrald green field she wanted her kite to soar into the sky like a rocket but she tried but it wont soar into the sky then it started to fly she was happy. Suddenly it got stuck she pulled and pulled but it wont come of then thunder was comeing next to her she was scared then her courful kite got of the tree she said i wish this day will never end.

  14. On a sunny day a little girl called Lucy was skipping across the dense field with an enormuous,colourful kite.She was determined to get it to fly before tea “Come on! Come on!Fly!”Lucy shouted as she draaged the string faster and even faster.Across the emerald blanket of grass,she ran as fast as a cheetah.
    Then a blast of wind whoosh the kite up the clear,blue sky.Her kite soared up the sky like an eagle searching for prey.When Lucy closed her eyes she imagined that she was a bird flying under the sun’s warm rays.She hope that this perfect day would never end.
    Sliver;
    The little girl called Lucy was happily playing with her kite in the clear,blue sky.She was day dreaming about being a bird flying under the sun’s warm rays.suddenly then the colourful kite got stuck in a tree and she tried to pull it out. Although she tried millons of times it did not come out.All of that happened because she was day dreaming , not looking and not thinking
    Bronze;
    The little,cute girl had her wonderful,enormous,colourful kite which she never flyied,she shouted “Come on! Fly!” and she dragged the string faster and faster. She was determined to get it to fly before tea.however the wonderful kite would just never fly.

  15. On a sunny day a little girl called Lucy was skipping across the dense field with an enormuous,colourful kite.She was determined to get it to fly before tea “Come on! Come on!Fly!”Lucy shouted as she draaged the string faster and even faster.Across the emrald blanket of grass,she ran as fast as a cheetah.
    Then a blast of wind whoosh the kite up the clear,blue sky.Her kite soared up the sky like an eagle searching for prey.When Lucy closed her eyes she imagined that she was a bird flying under the sun’s warm rays.She hope that this perfect day would never end.
    Sliver;
    The little girl called Lucy was happily playing with her kite in the clear,blue sky.She was day dreaming about being a bird flying under the sun’s warm rays.suddenly then the colourful kite got stuck in a tree and she tried to pull it out. Although she tried millons of times it did not come out.All of that happened because she was day dreaming , not looking and not thinking
    Bronze;
    The little,cute girl had her wonderful,enormous,colourful kite which she never flyied,she shouted “Come on! Fly!” and she dragged the string faster and faster. She was determined to get it to fly before tea.however the wonderful kite would just never fly.

  16. Gold challenge

    Lucy skipped happily across the shimmering field trying to get her kite to fly but it wouldn’t budge. Suddenly she started to run fast and faster then……… WHOOSH. The kite soared up into the sky like an eagle hunting for prey.

  17. There was a girl who name was Lucy one amazing fresh day she went to try her couloful kite when she went outside the sun was burning like sand that’s never been cold for 53 years.The grass was so beautiful she couldn’t even believe her eyes .As she crossed the grass of shiny unbelievable emerald’s. The End

  18. Gold –
    One sunny day,a girl named Lucy went out to fly her kite. She stepped out on the lush green grass,clutching onto a string which was attached to a rainbow kite. She went out and walked past the shops finnaly reaching the enourmous park. She started to run through the emarald blanket of grass in order to fly the kite. Over the medow, Lucy began running across the waving blades of grass as she had a big smile on her face.But her kite simply didn’t fly.At last,tired out, she sat nearby a tree.Suddenly, she stood up and tried one last time.Whoosh…up the kite soard like rocket in the air.Lucy imagined she was a bird too,flying free under the sunns warm rays. As the kite went high up through the great thick white clouds,she thought this perfect day would never end.Lucy was determined to get her colourful kite to fly before tea.

  19. Bronze:
    Lucy was running as fast as lightning, to fly her beautiful vibrant kite in the clear blue sky.She kept running until it flue, but it never flue.

    Silver:
    Very slowly her kite started to fly like an eagle searching for its prey.Lucy’s kite was way up high. After a little while the kite slowly started to come down and boooom it got stuck in a tree.

    Gold:
    Lucy skipped happily across the field waving her kite around.The grass was like a emerald blanket.Lucy was determined to get her kite to fly bore tea.

    “Come on come on fly!”She shouted dragging the kite along

    ONE…LAST…PULL and WOOSHHHH

  20. Silver
    Lucy wanted to play with her beautiful kite so she decided to go outside when she got her kite outside she ran as fast as a cheeter but her kite did not fly above or under the cotton clouds because there was no wind for it to fly Lucy felt very very VERY upset Lucy said ” why won’t my kite fly “she mumbled.

  21. Silver challenge:
    Gracefully Lucy’s kite soared through the baby blue sky. She was happily playing with her kite when suddenly out of nowhere the kite got stuck in the tree!

    Gold challenge:
    Lucy was running around the emerald blanket of grass trying to make the kite fly. She was determined to get the kite to fly before supper. Lucy was there for hours but she just could not get the kite to fly.

  22. Gold Challenge

    Lucy, skipped happily across the lush field with her new kite in its case. She had never flew a kite befor and she was determined to fly it before tea. Immediately she opened the case and felt the silky soft string attached to it.Soon she ran like a bullet across the blanket of grass ,however nothing happened…

  23. One early morning there was a girl called Lucy playing with her colourful
    kite. She wanted her magical kite to fly. The kite was flying a little bit because the wind was weak. Then the wind got stronger and stronger so her kite was stuck into the green lush tree. Lucy wanted the kite to fly before tea. After that, the kite went out of the tree and started flying and she ran as fast as she could across the green emerald field. Suddenly, she stopped, slowly closed her eyes and she dreamed she was a bird flying under the warm sun’s rays. As her kite was flying in the clear blue sky, she was very happy.

  24. On one sunny day a little girl called Lucy was skipping across the dence field with an enourmuous,colourful kite.She was determined to get it to fly before tea”Come on! Come on!Fly!”Lucy shoted as she draaged the string faster and even faster.Across the emrald blanket of grass,she ran as fast as a cheetah.
    Then a blast of wind whoosh the kite up the clear,blue sky.Her kite scored up the sky like an eagle seacting for prey.When Lucy closed her eyes she imaging that she was a bird flying under the sun’s warm rays.She hope that this perfect day would never end.
    Sliver;
    The little girl called Lucy was happily playing with her kite in the clear,blue sky.She was day dreaming about beening a bird flying under the sun’s warm rays.But then the colourful kite got stuck in a tree and she tried to pull it out. Atough she tried millons of times it never worked.All of that happened because she was day dreaming and not looking.
    Bronze;
    The little,cute girl had her wonderful,enormous,colourful kite never flyied,she shoted “Come on! Fly!” and she dragged the string faster and even faster. She was determined to get it to fly before tea.But the wonderful kite would just never fly.

  25. Bronze challenge
    Lucy sprinted like lightning in the lush,green field when she was trying to make her shiny,pretty kite to fly in the clear blue sky. She kept on sprinting and sprinting but her kite just never flyer.

    Silver challenge
    Quickly the beautiful kite began to fly like an bird in the clear,blue sky.lucy was very happy because she new she could do it before tea.

    gold challenge
    The vibrant girl was happily skipping through the large,lush,green field.
    Lucy was very determined to make it fly before tea because it fall the first time she did it. She sprinted and sprinted and whhoooosh the kite was flying

  26. Gold:
    Lucy skipped across the lush green grass. She was determined to get her kite to fly before tea! She kept on running and running but the kite would just not fly.” How will I ever get this kite to fly?” Lucy asked herself. Across the emerald blanket of grass,she ran like lightning. One last pull…..and whoosh! Up the kite soared like an eagle searching for prey. As she closed her eyes Lucy imagined she was a bird too flying free under the suns warm rays. Lucy was very happy and hoped this perfect day would never end!

  27. gold
    Lucy skipped across the lush green grass. The grass was as green as an emerald. She was determined to get her vibrant kite to fly before tea. Lucy tried pulling and swinging the string faster and faster but it would not fly. Just then a strong gust of wind shot the kite up into sky as fast as a bullet and Lucy was swept off her feet as she tried to get control of the kite. Lucy ran as fast as a rocket hoping this perfect day would never end.

    • Well done Aliya however, remember to read your work for correct punctuation and ensure you don’t repeat any part in a different way. Have a look at the ‘Just then sentence..’

  28. Early in the morning,Lucy strolled down a narrow path,leading to a lush green field nearby,She was ecstatic about flying her kite.Holding her kite by the string tightly,Lucy sprinted like lightning across the emerald blanket of grass,pull…pull WHOOSH!Up the kite soared like qn eagle searching for its prey.

  29. Gold;
    On one sunny day a little girl called Lucy was happily skipped across the nice dence field with an enormous,colourful kite.She was determined to get the wonderful kite to fly before tea.”Come on! Come on!Fly!”Lucy shoted as she draaged the string faster and even faster.Across the emrald blanket of grass,she ran as fast as a cheetah.

    Then a blast of wind whoosh the kite up the clear,blue sky.Her kite scored up the sky like an eagle seacting for prey.When Lucy closed her eyes she imaging that she was a bird flying under the sun’s warm rays.She hope that this perfect day would never end.

    Sliver;
    The little girl called Lucy was happily playing with her kite in the clear,blue sky.She was day dreaming about beening a bird flying under the sun’s warm rays.But then the colourful kite got stuck in a tree and she tried to pull it out. Atough she tried millons of times it never worked.All of that happened because she was day dreaming and not looking.

    Bronze;
    The little,cute girl had her wonderful,enormous,colourful kite never flyied,she shoted “Come on! Fly!” and she dragged the string faster and even faster. She was determined to get it to fly before tea.But the wonderful kite would just never fly.

    By ABDULAH

  30. Bronze Challenge:

    Lucy skipped happily across the lush,green field that shone like an emerald.
    Lucy was determined to get her colourful kite to fly before tea.
    Over the medow Lucy began running across the waving blades of grass as she had a big smile on her face.
    As Lucy was waving her kite it suddenly got stuck in a tree.

  31. silver;
    Lucy skipped happily across the emerald blanket of grass. Lucy determined her kite to fly before tea time so she run fast like lightning but the kite .
    ”come on fly” Lucy shouted.

  32. gold challenge
    While Lucy imagined, that her colourful kite was flying the kite suddenly got stuck in a lush green tree.

    Lucy was determined to get her beautiful kite to fly before tea.
    Through the lush green tree Lucy kite stayed there with not a broken bit.

  33. Gold:

    Quickly, Lucy scuttled across the vibrant lush grass. She was desperately determined to get her vivid kite in the sunny radiant sky. Lucy repeatedly tried and tried, but her courageous spirit never gave up. But sadly, the kite just didn’t go in the air.

    • Gold challenge
      When the sun had just rose, Lucy woke up and decided that it was the right time to fly her kite. She ran down the never-ending stairs and grabbed the string of the colourful kite. She sprinted across the lush sheet of grass with the kite that started to follow her. Her kite followed her like it was playing follow the leader. It was as if it was her best friend.

  34. Bronze challenge
    Lucy skipped happily across the lush,green field that shone like an emerald.
    Lucy was determined to get her colourful kite to fly before tea.
    Over the medow Lucy began running across the waving blades of grass as she had a big smile on her face.
    As Lucy was waving her kite it suddenly got stuck in a tree.
    Silver challenge
    As Lucy began to wonder of she found a nice big area to fly her multi coloured .
    As she was waving it gently floated in the air.
    Very slow the kite soared up in the calm,clear blue sky like an angle.
    Gold challenge
    Lucy ran to an emerald blanket of grass.
    Lucy ran over the razor sharp medow like an cheetah.
    High up the kite soard like rocket in the air.

  35. gold challenge
    Happily Lucy skipped across the emerald lime grass. She had a colourful kite in her hand, all morning she was determined to fly her kite. Suddenly a gust of wind blew the kite up in the sky. When the kite flew up in the air, it sounded like an eagle searching for prey.The little girl closed her eyes and wished that this Perfect summary day would never end.

  36. Lucy skipped happily across the emerald grass that shimmered and glistened. She was determined to get it to fly before tea as, she had been trying in Summer. This was her only chance.” Come on fly!” She shouted.” Just…a…little…faster! Suddenly the kite flew in the air like a plane lift of the ground. She wished this perfect day would never end!

  37. Gold challenge

    Lucy ran on the emerald grass. She ran like a bullet,come on … come on … come on. Then up it went. High in to the bright,blue sky. Whooooo! Yes! I’m flying a kite i can’t believe it. I must be dreaming i can’t fly a kite. I wish this day would never end.

  38. Gold
    Lucy was skipping happily in the field which had a lot of grass.
    Lucy was super happy enjoying the day .
    Finally her kite got stuck so she went home.

  39. A dilemma is a problem and a build up is like a problem is solved.
    Gold challenge
    Lucy happily skipped in the field with a big smile.
    Lucy ran to the emerald green grass.
    Lucy was so happy she had a warm smile.

    Bronze challenge
    Lucy ran to the shiny field she ran her take her.
    Lucy played with her kite then her glittery kite got stuck.
    Lucy was so sad she began the cry.

    Silver challenge
    Very slowly her kite started to fly like a Angele.
    Her kite was so high in the blue sky.
    The kite was very up in the sky after a while it started to lower down and it got stuck.
    Gold challenge
    Lucy was skipping happily with a big happy face.
    Lucy was so happy like a shining star.
    Lucy was so sad because her kite got stuck.

    • A good start Hargun. Well done for having a go at each challenge but if you focus on one and ensure you check what you have written that would be good.

  40. Lucy was once playing with her kite in the Emerald grass field. Suddenly she closed her eyes and started dreaming that she was a bird flying under the hot sun. As she was dreaming, her kite got stuck in a tall tree. So she tried to pull the kite back. Although she tried many times, the kite didn’t come down. If she has not dreamt, her kite would have been saved. All this happened because she was day dreaming.

  41. Bronze:
    Lucy was running as fast as lighting in the field as she was trying to make her beautiful kite fly in the clear blue sky. She kept on running although her kite was not flying.

    Silver:
    Very slowly the kite started to fly like an eagle in the sky. Lucy’s kite was very high up in the clouds but after a while it started to lower down and it got stuck in a tree.

    Gold:
    Lucy was skipping happily in the field which had a lot of green, emerald looking grass. Lucy was determined to get the kite to fly before tea. She kept on running but the kite just didn’t fly.

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