Y4B Home Learning – Wednesday 6th May – English

For today’s home learning, we would like you to edit and improve you poems from yesterday. To do this, we are going to add some figurative language like – alliteration, similes, metaphors, powerful verbs and adverbs.
You will need your poem from yesterday so you can improve it.

Here are my poems from yesterday that I will improve. If you remember for the silver challenge, I made a poem using a rhyming scheme AAAA. I then adapted this for the gold challenge to write 2 verses using the rhyming scheme AABB.

SILVER POEM:
Learning about King Henry VIII is interesting,
He is infamous for being a very different king.
He is known because he did curious things,
He married many times and liked beheadings.


GOLD POEM:
Learning about King Henry VIII is interesting,
He is infamous for being a very different king.
He had a wife, the most beautiful Queen,
But is she the best he had ever seen?

He is known because he did curious things,
He married many times and liked beheadings.
He truly is the greediest king there has been,
And to be honest, he was incredibly mean.

Looking at my silver poem, I could improve it by adding adverbs (terribly, extremely), more powerful verbs (renowned) and some alliteration (thoughtless things). I have also noticed that I start three lines with ‘He’ so I will change that to Henry.

Learning about King Henry VIII is terribly interesting,
He is infamous for being a extremely different king.
Henry is
renowned because he did thoughtless things,
He married many times and liked beheadings.

Now to add my improvements to the gold challenge poem with my additions as well.
This time, as well as including adverbs, powerful verbs and alliteration, I will include a simile.

Learning about King Henry VIII is terribly interesting,
He is infamous for being a extremely different king.

Like a stunning summer’s day, the most beautiful Queen,
But is she the prettiest he had ever seen?


Henry is
renowned because he did thoughtless things,
He married many times and adored beheadings.

As greedy a pig, the worst king there has been,
And to be honest, he was disgusting and incredibly mean.

Bronze:
I have been trying to improve my poem by adding figurative language including; adverbs, powerful verbs, similes and alliteration.

What type of figurative language are the phrases “As greedy as a pig” and “Like a stunning summer’s day”?

Why did I change the word known for the word renowned?

Silver:
With your poem from yesterday, add adverbs, some alliteration and change some verbs to be more powerful.

Gold:
Again using your poem from yesterday, add a simile or a metaphor to the poem. If you think a line could sound better written in a different way, then change it.

20 thoughts on “Y4B Home Learning – Wednesday 6th May – English

  1. Silver:
    Yesterday:
    In the lake
    It was green,
    I saw a snake
    Biting on a screen.
    On a slide
    That was fake,
    Something gushing like a tide,
    Things began to break.
    Today;
    In the grimy lake
    It was green,
    I saw a large snake
    Biting on a demoralized screen.
    On a slippery slide
    That was fake,
    Something gushing like a tide,
    Things began to suddenly break.

  2. Bronze
    As greedy as a pig is a simile because it has as in it.
    Like a stunning summers day is a metaphor because it has no like or as.
    You changed the word known to renowned because known was boring and renowned was interesting. My

  3. Bronze
    The phares as greedy as a pig is a simeli.
    Like a stunning summers day is a metaphor.
    Silver
    There was an tudor and he screamed when he saw a green scary snake he ran away from it and lied about it he fell down the slide and saw that green scary snake agian a began to cry

    • Hi Asilah.
      Maybe you could ask your sister with this because your poem is not in the correct style or format.
      Please try again looking at my explanation from yesterday.

  4. Bronze
    What type of figurative language are the phrases “As greedy as a pig” and “Like a stunning summer’s day”?
    The phrases as greedy as a pig and like a stunning summer’s day are both similes.
    Why did I change the word known for the word renowned?
    You changed the word known for the word renowned because you wanted to make it sound better and add expression.
    Silver

  5. Silver:
    With your poem from yesterday, add adverbs, some alliteration and change some verbs to be more powerful.
    the shining light flew a kite.
    it mound i mite.
    it took 3 bites.

  6. Bronze:
    I have been trying to improve my poem by adding figurative language including; adverbs, powerful verbs, similes and alliteration.

    What type of figurative language are the phrases “As greedy as a pig” and “Like a stunning summer’s day”?
    they are similes.

    Why did I change the word known for the word renowned?
    renowned means known or talked about by many people famous.

  7. Bronze
    As greedy as a pig and Like a stunning summers day are a simile because both of the phrases have as and like in the beginning.
    I think they changed the word known for renowned because renowned is a more powerful word to use rather than known.

  8. In 1922
    BBC formed and slides were made too
    In June Irish saw civil war
    In December, formed USSR

    This is a poem me and my dad made. It is about 1922.

  9. Bronze
    The phrase ” As greedy as a pig” is a simile.
    The phrase ” Like a stunning summer’s day” is a metaphor.
    I think you changed the word because renowned is more powerful.

    Silver
    Years ago, there lived a young boy named Drew,
    Who was dazzled by the colour blue.
    Astonishingly, like a beanstalk, he increased and grew,
    Until, as quick as a flash , he soared and flew.

  10. Bronze
    You changed the word renowned for known because renowned means known or talked about by many people or famous and known means recognized, familiar, or within the scope of knowledge.
    Gold
    Learning about King Henry VIII is famously interesting,
    He is infamous for being a exceedingly different king.
    His wife was the most beautiful Queen,
    But is she the charmingest he had ever seen?

    He is recognised because he did thoughtless things,
    He married many times and admire beheadings.
    He was the worst king there has been,
    And to be honest, he was disgusting and incredibly mean.

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