Y4R Home Learning – Wednesday 6th May – English

For today’s home learning, we would like you to edit and improve you poems from yesterday. To do this, we are going to add some figurative language like – alliteration, similes, metaphors, powerful verbs and adverbs.
You will need your poem from yesterday so you can improve it.

Here are my poems from yesterday that I will improve. If you remember for the silver challenge, I made a poem using a rhyming scheme AAAA. I then adapted this for the gold challenge to write 2 verses using the rhyming scheme AABB.

SILVER POEM:
Learning about King Henry VIII is interesting,
He is infamous for being a very different king.
He is known because he did curious things,
He married many times and liked beheadings.


GOLD POEM:
Learning about King Henry VIII is interesting,
He is infamous for being a very different king.
He had a wife, the most beautiful Queen,
But is she the best he had ever seen?

He is known because he did curious things,
He married many times and liked beheadings.
He truly is the greediest king there has been,
And to be honest, he was incredibly mean.

Looking at my silver poem, I could improve it by adding adverbs (terribly, extremely), more powerful verbs (renowned) and some alliteration (thoughtless things). I have also noticed that I start three lines with ‘He’ so I will change that to Henry.

Learning about King Henry VIII is terribly interesting,
He is infamous for being a extremely different king.
Henry is
renowned because he did thoughtless things,
He married many times and liked beheadings.

Now to add my improvements to the gold challenge poem with my additions as well.
This time, as well as including adverbs, powerful verbs and alliteration, I will include a simile.

Learning about King Henry VIII is terribly interesting,
He is infamous for being a extremely different king.

Like a stunning summer’s day, the most beautiful Queen,
But is she the prettiest he had ever seen?


Henry is
renowned because he did thoughtless things,
He married many times and adored beheadings.

As greedy a pig, the worst king there has been,
And to be honest, he was disgusting and incredibly mean.

Bronze:
I have been trying to improve my poem by adding figurative language including; adverbs, powerful verbs, similes and alliteration.

What type of figurative language are the phrases “As greedy as a pig” and “Like a stunning summer’s day”?

Why did I change the word known for the word renowned?

Silver:
With your poem from yesterday, add adverbs, some alliteration and change some verbs to be more powerful.

Gold:
Again using your poem from yesterday, add a simile or a metaphor to the poem. If you think a line could sound better written in a different way, then change it.

18 thoughts on “Y4R Home Learning – Wednesday 6th May – English

  1. Bronze
    Sunny breezing _ nice day
    You changed the word known for renowned because it means the same
    I will send I picture for silver and gold

  2. Upon a nice mid-spring day,
    Let’s take a look at nature’s way.
    Breathe the scent of nice fresh air,
    Feel the breeze within your hair.

  3. This figurative language is similes like a stunning summer day
    You change the word to renowned because it is figurative language.

    Silver
    I won’t let him take as my name is Jake
    Slippery slimy snake try after another break.

  4. bronze
    The figurative language above is simile’s because Mr Cater has described like greedy as a pig.

    you changed renowned for known because they both have the same meaning.

  5. Bronze
    1.The figurative language above is similes because Mr Carter has describe like a stunning summer’s day or like greedy as pig.
    2.You changed it because Renowned and known have the same meaning so you can replace it.

  6. Bronze
    The figurative language above is similes because Mr Carter has discribe like a stunning summers day or like greedy as a pig.
    Renowned and known have the same meaning so you can replace it.
    Silver
    I want to fight
    because I missed my flight
    My name is Mike
    I love the brand Nike
    Gold
    I want to fight
    I’m as light as a kite
    And I’m Mike
    I love nike

  7. Gold

    Down in the woods, there’s a rabbit.
    She sees a carrot,
    Just like a hungry deer, she will grab it
    And that’s her eating habit.
    It’s cold and hasn’t got a jacket.

    Edit:
    Added a new simile line (Just like a hungry deer, she will grab it)

  8. Down in the woods, there’s a rabbit.
    As soon as she sees a carrot she will grab it!
    And that’s her eating habit.
    It’s cold and hasn’t got a jacket.

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