Year 5

Hi Year 5,

Earlier in the year, you wrote a first person recount from the short film “La Luna”. Your challenge is to write a similar piece (a recount written in the first person (I/me) ) but from the perspective of different characters.

We would like to see all the amazing progress you have made this year so show off your skills! In your writing: expanded noun phrases, figurative language, advanced punctuation, interesting sentence openers, Action + Description + Dialogue . In your reading: using your inference skills, making suggestions about a character’s feelings and behaviour based on what you can see, understanding the relationship between the characters.

Watch the film and then plan and write your piece:

Bronze Challenge

Write a first person recount from the perspective of the little boy.

Silver Challenge

Write a first person recount from the perspective of the father.

Gold Challenge:

Write a first person recount from the perspective of the grandfather.

Impress us!

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41 thoughts on “Year 5

  1. BRONZE:

    I was sailing an ancient boat with my grandfather and my dad.While I was sailing the boat,my grandfather gave out a box and told me to open it.I opened the box and it drew a big smile across my face.It was brown,dull and amazing.It was a hat.After a while,I got so irretated because of my grandfather and dad.They just won’t stop changing the way I wear my hat.Then I just wore my hat how I wanted to.

  2. As me,my farther and my grandfather slowly went in to the sea ,boating. I received a dull sailor hat. I put it on my messy,black hair.My father and my grandfather started fighting about what style they wanted it. My farther likes it completely straight but my grandfather liked the point peeking upwards. We waited in the boat for so long. Then we saw a a bright Corasal moon that glisned on the blue water.

    Then my farther pulled out a very long and tall ladder which led right up to it.I had to carry a heavy anchor which was layed on my weak back. I climbed the very tall and long ladder . When I reached the top of the ladder the force lifted me up. I was a little bit scared but I was also a little bit excited.

  3. Bronze Challenge

    As the father of this boy,he has to do as I said because
    when I was little as my son he is now, I use to listen to my dad and my grandpa . I want him to be like me .So he should listen to his father.

  4. Bronze challenge
    Me my dad and my grandfather set sail on the crystal majestic ocean. Meanwhile I received a wonderful present,a hat. It was my first time doing all of this. As always my father and his father never got on and always argued about something. This time they argued about how I should wear my hat. We had then stopped and my beloved father pulled out colossal, brown wooden ladders. My grandpa tapped me and that was a sign to climb them. I bravely wrapped and anchor over me and the moon shone upon me. I had just then began to climb up the ladder. When I reached the top and I was upside down and it seemed like they were upside down to. I looked at the breath taken view on the moon. There were millions of glowing stars on it. Just then another shooting star came passing by. I was tempted to go near it. So I did but just then my father called me we had to clean the mess. There was another argument of what I should use. CRASH. A gigantic star fell. We tried to take it away but it broke our tools. I climbed on the star and listened to the sounds it made. I took a hammer with me and hammered it down. We cleared up the mess and after I was trapped on my head for helping them work. I wish I could do it again.

  5. Bronze
    it feels likd im traped in a horrible nightmare my dad and grandad keep on fighting they are ment to be sweeping the moon but all they do is fight they are also ment to be looking after me so i feel realy bad so i dont realy whant to be there but he took me any way they were fighting over what job should i do dads job or grand dads job so thats why i dont whant to be here

  6. Gold
    As me, dad and the little boy walk across the vivid moon, the rapturous stars started make a insignificant noise. The miniature noise echoed and synthesize with the air. I stood on a florid blanket full of satisfaction. The halcyon moon lit up the whole elliptical galaxy.

    Me and dad fighting with the tool we should use, such a pity. We should not have that unfathomable argument for which tool to use. A substantial shooting star came as instantaneous as lightning and ended the senseless argument. We ran and hid in hole full luminous stars. We peaked to see if anything was alternated. The thing which emerged was a tremendous star.

    I was stunned with the coloured look with the star.

  7. BRONZE

    Today is my first day on the job and I am going with my dad and granddad.They did not tell me were I am going and what the job is but I am excited.my granddabd has a trolly of brooms,mops and rackes so I guess he is a cleaner but why are we in the middle of the ocean or sea.Then I saw what I thoght was the moon made out of stars!I couldnt beleive my eyes my granddad gave me a giant ladder.I did a little snigger and my dad gave me a anchor and my snigger fadde away and I got seriuos.The I climed the ladder and I floatd and the boat floated up to the moon and then my dads started fighting over what tool to use.Then a giant star came down and my dad tryed to get it out but It was stuck so I took a hammer and hit it and it turend into smaller stars.They were amazed and together we shaped the moon!!!

    THE END!!!

  8. As me, my dad and my granddad drifted across the serene and sapphire ocean the blue,appealing sea glowed across the world.suddenly we paused in the middle of the ocean whilst my granddad pulled out a package which looked as if he was going to give to me.I opened the package and saw a brown leathered hat.first my dad turned my hat then my grandfather did it and it ended up as a disaster.I was really curious when my dad opened the wooden hatch but surprisingly a dull wooden ladder appeared. The strong, hard working dad stood beside the amber, rusty ladder. my dad pulled it up up up into the indigo beautiful sky.while looking up I saw the most charming and glowing SUN FULL of stars.AS I climbed up the rusty ladder I was determined that something special would be up in the sky.When I reached up on the sun I saw a bunch of glowing stars. While I was exploring my dad and finally got up so we started cleaning.

  9. Me, my dad,and my little boy slowly swift through the crystal cerulean sea, as it reflects against the ancient boat, La Luna.
    The midnight sky ocean stretched miles and miles across. Tired and bored, I stare at the bedarken sky, as millions of gleaming stars were scattered along skies. After my dad had got the silver rusty anchor, and threw it over the wooden oak boat into the briny sea. He slowly got out a present, which had been wrapped up in a striped blue and white cloth and tied up with a small piece of string and gave it to my little lovely son. Gently he unravels the present and there he saw a primitive hat just like his my hat. I had seen that his eyes were filled with delight. When he had placed it on to his small head, my dad thought he was wearing it wrong, since he had put his hat towards the sky. But I thought this was wrong and this made me frustrated, and so I thought it to be flat as normal. Then after my dad had changed the postion of the hat again. I got fed up and changed it flat and I picked him up placing him on the seat. However my dad got furious, pulling a frown at me, as his shaggy wispy white beard had covered his fragile mouth and turned of the luminous ancient lamp. As Grandad sits on the bench cross, he stares at me with his puny eyes, meanwhile I cross my hands and glare back.

    Out of knowhere, came a huge gleaming, zinc-siver lustrous disc, as lasers of the moonlight reflected against the serene, majestic ocean. There were ominous dark clouds gathering overhead in the starry night sky. I stare at the freckled stars, that have been sprinkled in the pitch-black sky. I threw an anchor and rope to him and as Grandad urged me to climb up the long wooden ladder and wrapped it around his body, while I pull up the ladder. After I said to my son “Be brave and go up the stairs”, since he felt uncomfortable. Feeling confident, he slowly takes a step at a time, as I felt so contented. When he reached the top of the ladder, he looked down and then started to hover in the air and landed on the shimmering moon.

    [I will continue….]

    • Velvet black blankets lay in the sky, while my son admired the radiant small solid stars, but there was no time to admire anything, just working.
      “Tie the anchor somewhere now,” I demanded.
      My son had tied the anchor in a bunch of shimmering stars in a hole. Then I shouted out “Me and grandad are coming up the ladder”. Slowly, step by step I went up the creaky ladder and I had saw a huge fleet of small gleaming stars. Each step I took a light bing sound clattered against my ears. I had took out some cleaning equipment to sweep all of the stars. As I teach my son how to sweep, he curiously listens to me as I spin my broom in my hand and lend it to my son. Then my dad comes in and says this is not the right equipment to use, as he holds an old dirty mop and tries to give it to my son. I reply back and say” Don’t listen to him”. Eventually an argument started to happened between me and grandad. While we were arguing, out of knowhere in the sky came a huge turquoise spiral came rapidly rushing at me, so I ran as fast as I could and jumped in large pile of glimmering stars. Trembling in fear, I rose up, not making a single sound, and I saw a gigantic illuminated star. I just couldn’t believe it. My jaw dropped to the ground. While me and dad try to move it, sweat pours down on my forehead. Strangely, my son ran to the bucket to get a hammer, as he nearly got stuck.
      Turning his ancient hat backwards, he climbs up the star, as I was thinking what are you doing? Then he got his hammer and cracked open the star, and there came out a million shattered stars. My eyes were raised up and stars began to trickle down. A tear ran down my face, as I look at my proud valiant son. After went down the ladder, and I smiled at my son and patted him on the back, as we look at the moon.

  10. Bronze
    I always wanted to go with my dad and grandad we were alone because they have secrets they never talk to me about, so I think it’s now time for them to confess.I love my dad and grandad all in all, but not knowing about the secrets makes me feel I’m not in the family,it just feels unusual for a 10 year old boy like me.
    As I jumped on the boat, I was excited for all the things we were going to see provided that I’ve never went on the boat before.I was as excited as a boy gets to have all the chocolate in the world.I had a funny feeling that something strange was going to happen today but the truth is I don’t know what.As my dad and grandad put the boat in the sea and jumped in they felt a little bit proud, but what I didn’t know is what they were proud for.After everyone jumped in the boat there was an awkward silence, now I definitely knew something fascinating something beautiful was lurking in the darkness.That night,it was really dark,it was so dark I could barely see my dad and grandad’s faces.It was also a full moon,and that was a bit strange too because I have never saw a full moon since I was 5 and that was the last time me dad and grandad went on the boat without me.I felt I was in for a treat, something no child no man has ever seen before,it felt on that day the greatest day of my life was finally here.
    Suddenly,after we were ten meters away from dry land,my grandad gave me something,something was wrapped up in blue wrapping paper.My family would never wrap up anything because my family couldn’t afford wrapping paper.What could it be?It felt I had all the power in the world on my hands.It must be something special,something all the family has but what did all the family has.After another awkward silence my dad told me to open it.I felt as curious as a person could possibly be.I opened it.Of course!The same hat my dad and grandad has.It felt I was part of a secret society now I had the same hat as my dad and grandad.But why would they give me a hat?Out of all the things a hat.
    My curiousity was growing,it was growing as every second passed by.I didn’t even notice my dad and grandad changing how should I wear my hat, I just wanted to know what they were going to show me.I didn’t even notice when my dad pushed me onto the bench.My curiousity began to stop for one second as my dad and grandad looked like they were having a staring contest.My dad wiped his nose with his hands.I did it too because it felt again like I was part of the family.I thought for one second they were going to show me it.The thing nobody has ever seen.My grandad put his finger in his ear but again I did it because it felt I was part of the secret society thing.
    All of a sudden, a ball of light came right into my eyes.Now it was the time.The time where I would see it.The thing nobody has seen before.The greatest day of my life had finally arrived.The day had come.It was bright as the sun itself.It looked amazing.Mu eyes widened catching the whole part of the golden piece of sparkle and shine.I felt like I was going to live here forever, not sleeping on the floor anymore and having Brussels sprouts everyday, I was going to live here for the rest of my life.
    Silver
    I was really proud showing my son the thing that in my family has been passed from owner to owner from generations.But now I feel proud to say my son is the owner and what a valiant owner he will be.I know my lad with love owning a big ball of stars,I just know he will.He is a curious little boy,my son is but I made him curious,all he does is sits on the sofa watching the view.It will be the greatest day of his life,for once he will own something that is actually his.
    At the strike of 12’o clock,my son ran and suddenly jumped on the boat like a tornado.I’ve never seen my son this excited before as dad walking so slowly from the house pushed the boat with me into the sea.In the sea with the closest family and on the middle of the night is such a beautiful thing.Nothing stands in your way.You can do anything.As everyone jumped on the boat there was a silence that I’m always used to because every time I go with my dad to somewhere, there always is a slience at the start.Everyone was just admiring the view,looking at every glimpse.
    Dad suddenly out of nowhere got a present wrapped up.Then I thought what is it.Suddenly, I remembered.It was the hat my dad and I have that we were wearing.It shows a bit like you have saw the star world.My dad never told me why I got the hat but he one day told me he didn’t know either.Another silence occurred because my boy tried to figure out what it was.I was getting a little fed up of the silence so I told my lad to open it.Opening it with great care,he saw the hat and quick to my feet I put the hat on my son’s head.I knew Dad was going to change how the boy had to wear it and how right I was he changed the style of how to wear it.He put the hat a little bit up then I changed it and then he changed it then so on.At the end my lad wore how I wear my hat and I pushed him to sit on the bench.Because I had a cold for at least two months now I wiped my nose with my hand and suddenly my son copied me and same with dad, my grandad put his finger in his ear and my son did the same thing.
    All of a sudden, the home of the Stars had arrived.At last, my son’s best day ever had come and to me it felt I was back home.Back where I belong.For 5 years I hadn’t visited my property and I thought it would be a total mess.But,now it isn’t my property,now it is my lad’s property and I am proud to say that because like a said it has been passed on for generations and now it is my son’s turn.Everybody on the boat looked like they just saw their future.After another silence, I got out a ladder and my son put his anchor on his hunched back and started to climb the ladder like the ladder was about to break.My son hadn’t seen anything yet,it isn’t even the beginning yet,the adventure hasn’t started.
    Gold
    It feels that I am not even a year old,my years have whizzed past me,but one day I will always remember is for the first time seeing the planet of the stars.The day felt unreal itself and I know my grandson will have the same feeling.There is always the same buzzing feeling in my head when I think about the planet of the stars,it just makes me feel light hearted.The planet of stars means everything for me,this is the only time I felt I was at home.
    When I went out of the house,my son and grandson were already there on the boat waiting for me.My grandson was counting every second as it went by, he knew something extraordinary was going to happen.Once the boat was up and running,there was a silence that always occurs when everyone first gets in the boat,it always happens,it happens ever since I was on the boat for the first time.I guess it is a family tradition.Everyone was listening to the wind howling and the trees cackling.This was very strange indeed because all my family,when the are going to see the planet of the stars,there is always birds chirping but this wasn’t the case.I guess the boy is special,very special indeed.
    Now I thought it was the right time to give my grandson the present.My son gave me a strange look when I got the present out but I’m not sure why.My son asked him to open it after another silence and then he saw it was a hat.Everyone in the family has got the same hat because it represents that you have been to the planet of stars.My grandson looked a little bit confused about what is going on,but the face eventually faded away once he saw the big ball of golden brightness rising to very top.Everyone was amazed to see it,even I was amazed even though I have seen it 7 times,more than anyone else in the family.
    My grandson got out the anchor and my son got out the ladder for the boy to climb up it to get to the planet of stars.The boy wrapped the anchor round himself and started to climb the ladder like he was on a mission to save the world.My grandson was in for a treat.

  11. BRONZE!!!!!!!

    The Little Boy.
    He gose on a trip with his dad and his grandad.
    They go and see wondiful things and find something.
    The thing they find is a bunch of stars. But there is 1 they really want.So they climb up a Brown Placstic Laddder.
    So the little boy climbs the ladder and finds a star and his grandad and his dad follows him and be very and and all of them jump.Alesha Ahmed :)

  12. Silver:
    As me, my son and father drifted on the harmonious, serene sea, my father handed out something wrapped with a violet cloth.My son stared at it with excitement, eager to open it.Without patience, my son opened it.It was a brown, colourless hat which me and my father wore.Me and my father didn’t like the style of the hat so we changed it, eventually we had an argument.I felt steamed and enraged.But suddenly a bright, vivid ball glistened in the dark, grey sky.My son was thrilled, happy and shocked about the event that has taken place. Tying the ship anchor to my son, he climbed on the ladder.My son reached to the top of the ladder and then a dominant force pushed him.What was it?
    It was gravity!My son admired the view glaring at the star which were coating the ball like sand covering the beach.My son climbed the long ladder and stared at it.
    “Hey, tie the ship anchor” I demanded.
    My son tied it to a bump and headed off towards the shooting star. There was no time glaring at it, after a few minutes I shouted “Hey, come here”. I took brushes and tools which helped me and my father to sweep all the stars. I wanted my son to sweep this way and my father wanted my son to sweep another way. This eventually caused an argument again. While arguing, a colossal shooting star crashed into the ground which made us all run behind a medium pile of stars. Full of fear, my son peaked. Trying to take out the shooting enormous stars, me and my father used all the equipment. But then a magnificent idea came into my son’s head. My son took out a hammer and climbed the huge star. We stared at him, concerned and nervous, something might happen to him. With lots of braveness, my son delicately cracked the star and fell to the ground.
    “No!!!” I shouted with fear and anger. I thought my son had been injured or harmed. But then, suddenly my son popped out the pile of stars and a gentle smile swept across his face. After a long day of fund, we climbed down the ladder and settled in our boat. That was a perfect adventure!!!

  13. BRONZE
    Today was the day I had to clean the moon. This was my first time going on an exciting adventure to the moon but I was very nervous because I do not know how this breath taking experience would be like.

  14. Me and my father and grandfather went to see the sea. After a few minutes later my dad and my grandfather had a fight it was rare to see my dad and my grandfather fight.Then the boy had went up the ladder to see some stars in the sky. So i thought to stop the fight and make grandfather and dad to forget about the fight and just relax.They had forgotten about what happened and they were cool and calm

    The End !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :)

  15. Bronze
    I always wanted to go with my dad and grandad we were alone because they have secrets they never talk to me about, so I think it’s now time for them to confess.I love my dad and grandad all in all, but not knowing about the secrets makes me feel I’m not in the family,it just feels unusual for a 10 year old boy like me.

    As I jumped on the boat, I was excited for all the things we were going to see provided that I’ve never went on the boat before.I was as excited as a boy gets to have all the chocolate in the world.I had a funny feeling that something strange was going to happen today but the truth is I don’t know what.As my dad and grandad put the boat in the sea and jumped in they felt a little bit proud, but what I didn’t know is what they were proud for.After everyone jumped in the boat there was an awkward silence, now I definitely knew something fascinating something beautiful was lurking in the darkness.That night,it was really dark,it was so dark I could barely see my dad and grandad’s faces.It was also a full moon,and that was a bit strange too because I have never saw a full moon since I was 5 and that was the last time me dad and grandad went on the boat without me.I felt I was in for a treat, something no child no man has ever seen before,it felt on that day the greatest day of my life was finally here.

    Suddenly,after we were ten meters away from dry land,my grandad gave me something,something was wrapped up in blue wrapping paper.My family would never wrap up anything because my family couldn’t afford wrapping paper.What could it be?It felt I had all the power in the world on my hands.It must be something special,something all the family has but what did all the family has.After another awkward silence my dad told me to open it.I felt as curious as a person could possibly be.I opened it.Of course!The same hat my dad and grandad has.It felt I was part of a secret society now I had the same hat as my dad and grandad.But why would they give me a hat?Out of all the things a hat.

    My curiousity was growing,it was growing as every second passed by.I didn’t even notice my dad and grandad changing how should I wear my hat, I just wanted to know what they were going to show me.I didn’t even notice when my dad pushed me onto the bench.My curiousity began to stop for one second as my dad and grandad looked like they were having a staring contest.My dad wiped his nose with his hands.I did it too because it felt again like I was part of the family.I thought for one second they were going to show me it.The thing nobody has ever seen.My grandad put his finger in his ear but again I did it because it felt I was part of the secret society thing.

    All of a sudden, a ball of light came right into my eyes.Now it was the time.The time where I would see it.The thing nobody has seen before.The greatest day of my life had finally arrived.The day had come.It was bright as the sun itself.It looked amazing.Mu eyes widened catching the whole part of the golden piece of sparkle and shine.I felt like I was going to live here forever, not sleeping on the floor anymore and having Brussels sprouts everyday, I was going to live here for the rest of my life.

    Silver
    I was really proud showing my son the thing that in my family has been passed from owner to owner from generations.But now I feel proud to say my son is the owner and what a valiant owner he will be.I know my lad with love owning a big ball of stars,I just know he will.He is a curious little boy,my son is but I made him curious,all he does is sits on the sofa watching the view.It will be the greatest day of his life,for once he will own something that is actually his.

    At the strike of 12’o clock,my son ran and suddenly jumped on the boat like a tornado.I’ve never seen my son this excited before as dad walking so slowly from the house pushed the boat with me into the sea.In the sea with the closest family and on the middle of the night is such a beautiful thing.Nothing stands in your way.You can do anything.As everyone jumped on the boat there was a silence that I’m always used to because every time I go with my dad to somewhere, there always is a slience at the start.Everyone was just admiring the view,looking at every glimpse.

    Dad suddenly out of nowhere got a present wrapped up.Then I thought what is it.Suddenly, I remembered.It was the hat my dad and I have that we were wearing.It shows a bit like you have saw the star world.My dad never told me why I got the hat but he one day told me he didn’t know either.Another silence occurred because my boy tried to figure out what it was.I was getting a little fed up of the silence so I told my lad to open it.Opening it with great care,he saw the hat and quick to my feet I put the hat on my son’s head.I knew Dad was going to change how the boy had to wear it and how right I was he changed the style of how to wear it.He put the hat a little bit up then I changed it and then he changed it then so on.At the end my lad wore how I wear my hat and I pushed him to sit on the bench.Because I had a cold for at least two months now I wiped my nose with my hand and suddenly my son copied me and same with dad, my grandad put his finger in his ear and my son did the same thing.

    All of a sudden, the home of the Stars had arrived.At last, my son’s best day ever had come and to me it felt I was back home.Back where I belong.For 5 years I hadn’t visited my property and I thought it would be a total mess.But,now it isn’t my property,now it is my lad’s property and I am proud to say that because like a said it has been passed on for generations and now it is my son’s turn.Everybody on the boat looked like they just saw their future.After another silence, I got out a ladder and my son put his anchor on his hunched back and started to climb the ladder like the ladder was about to break.My son hadn’t seen anything yet,it isn’t even the beginning yet,the adventure hasn’t started.

    Gold
    It feels that I am not even a year old,my years have whizzed past me,but one day I will always remember is for the first time seeing the planet of the stars.The day felt unreal itself and I know my grandson will have the same feeling.There is always the same buzzing feeling in my head when I think about the planet of the stars,it just makes me feel light hearted.The planet of stars means everything for me,this is the only time I felt I was at home.

    When I went out of the house,my son and grandson were already there on the boat waiting for me.My grandson was counting every second as it went by, he knew something extraordinary was going to happen.Once the boat was up and running,there was a silence that always occurs when everyone first gets in the boat,it always happens,it happens ever since I was on the boat for the first time.I guess it is a family tradition.Everyone was listening to the wind howling and the trees cackling.This was very strange indeed because all my family,when the are going to see the planet of the stars,there is always birds chirping but this wasn’t the case.I guess the boy is special,very special indeed.

    Now I thought it was the right time to give my grandson the present.My son gave me a strange look when I got the present out but I’m not sure why.My son asked him to open it after another silence and then he saw it was a hat.Everyone in the family has got the same hat because it represents that you have been to the planet of stars.My grandson looked a little bit confused about what is going on,but the face eventually faded away once he saw the big ball of golden brightness rising to very top.Everyone was amazed to see it,even I was amazed even though I have seen it 7 times,more than anyone else in the family.

    My grandson got out the anchor and my son got out the ladder for the boy to climb up it to get to the planet of stars.The boy wrapped the anchor round himself and started to climb the ladder like he was on a mission to save the world.My grandson was in for a treat.

  16. as me and my grandfather stretched it was our day to clean the lovely bright moon. not for my little boy of course.my grandpar had just given me a tiny cute gift i then tore the rapper of it.lnside it was a cool sailors hat.

    then we had a little debate how i should were my hat.then my dad had won so we just stopped my dad had switched of the lamp.then we had just sat there like we were waiting for something that is really special.i had just felt really board because we were just sat there for about 5 minutes thats how long we sat there.then granddad had wiped his nose with his hand so i copied him.then he put his finger in his wax i still did not know what we were waiting for.then all of a sudden it happened it all looked like a glowing shiny ball.it was the moon smootherd all up. it looked so amazing too.

  17. It was the day where we had to clean the moon,not for my son of course! It was totally new for him.But then we were sailing our boat adjusting our boat right where we wanted it. Grandfather and me gave him a hat. Unfortunately we had a fight of how to put the hat on him,and yes,I won the argument.And just then…

    The white ,luminescent sphere rose into the black, starry sky. I pulled up the ladder and it rose right next to the moon. I threw an anchor and rope over him and grandfather urged to climb up. When he was up ,I tugged the rope and we climbed up too.

    We started sweeping and I told my boy to sweep the fallen,glittering stars my way ,but grandfather, wanted it his way and we started arguing,again But meanwhile, a giant shooting star was heading our way ,so we hid in a cluster of stars. The star was not big,but gigantic! There was nothing we could do but when my boy climbed up the star and broke it into millions of stars with an hammer. He fell back to the ground and had a smiley smile on his face. We swept up the stars and came down the ladder back to Earth.

    By then all I could see was a shiny,glistening crescent standing in the sky.

  18. Bronze

    I stared in awe at the midnight blue stretch of ocean laid out before me as my strong Father rowed our ancient boat, the La Luna. Aboard it was my wise Grandpa and me. Then, we suddenly stopped and a voice put me off my train of thought. I looked at the trail of string leading off the boat next to my Grandpa and realised that the boat stopped because he must have cast anchor. I knew that the voice I heard was my Grandpa’s so I looked at him to see what he wanted me to do. Instead of giving me a chore though, he gave me a present. I tore open the starry wrapping paper and inside the cardboard box was my very own sailor’s hat!😃😃😃

    It was just like every generation had but as Father and Grandpa never agree on ANYTHING, they had a little debate for 10 minutes as to how I should wear my hat. In the end Father won and they stopped arguing. Grandpa turned off the lamp and they both sat as if they were waiting for something. I studied how they sat for 2 seconds and copied them because I thought that was how to be manly. I watched Father wipe his nose and I copied. I watched Grandpa pick wax out of his ear and again I copied though I still had no idea what we were waiting for.

    Then it happened. The sky was magically illuminated by what looked like a glowing ball of milk and cream. I soon realised that it was the moon close up. I stared in awe at this new miraculous sight that seemed to rise out of the very depths of the ocean itself. However, my Father thought that instead of enjoying this once in a lifetime view we should get to work as soon as possible.

    He gave me an anchor and set to work trying to get something out of the ship’s storage. I was just about to throw the anchor overboard when I was stopped by Grandpa. Then, Father produced a small ladder from the storage and started to extend it. Up and up it went until it was inches away from the moon. Father and Grandpa encouraged me to go up so I tied the anchor behind my back and set off. After the first few meters I felt uneasy about climbing the incredibly tall ladder but they cheered me on. Higher and higher I went and I felt that the higher I went the higher my confidence became.

    Very soon I was on the top foothold on the ladder and I felt that I could literally touch the moon but just then, I floated!!! First, the anchor felt much lighter and then my hat started to float but I put it back on. Next thing I knew I was flying and then I was on the moon!!!🌕🌕🌕🌖🌑🌘🌗🌒🌓🌔🌚🌝🌜🌛

    Then, my question of what made the moon shine was answered as I realised that millions of tiny glowing stars were all over the moon. I realised that this was where I was meant to drop the anchor and I was lucky enough to find a nearby cretor overflowing with stars. I half buried the anchor in there and watched as my Father and Grandpa climbed up. Halfway through their climb I saw a flash of blue light and a star landed. I picked it up and saw the brilliant light fade into that of the other stars as I put it down. I tapped it and saw a ripple of light go through it. Just then, I heard my Grandpa call me and I followed him and Father to what looked like a garden shed. From it, Father produced a tall container with wheels and got himself a flat, sturdy brush. Next, Grandpa got himself a long, sweeping brush. Then they went to a certain spot on the moon and started to sweep. I eagerly hopped over to watch them and a new argument grew when Father handed me his brush and showed me how to use it ( suprise suprise ). Grandpa then gave me his brush and they started to argue over who’s brush I should use. As they were muttering under their breath about each other I realised that their brushes looked just like their beards ( or in Fathers case moustache).

    I was playing around with this new discovery when the ground shook and I saw the biggest blue light ever!! We all dived for cover in a nearby cretor and the biggest star I ever saw landed at our feet! Father and Grandpa tried almost everything to get it out but the star wouldn’t budge.

    Then an idea hit me. I got a hammer out of the container and touched the star. Again it rippled. I climbed it and hit it with the hammer. For the first time in decades their bushy eyebrows rose to reveal their eyes as I fell among the shower of stars. Then, all of a sudden, I fell in the pile of stars. They ran to check if I was OK but I was fine so we all went home.

  19. bronze:
    A little boy goes on a boat with his granddad and his dad,after dad and granddad start fighting over each other.
    Then they find a big ladder then he boy goes then he sees lots of stars then he cleans it with his dad and granddad.

  20. Bronze challenge:
    As me my grandfather and my dad sailed across the sapphire blue sea ,My grandfather placed a chocolate brown hat on my head .Later on my father changed the direction of the creative hat.As my dad was doing this my grandfather moved my hat.They both started to argue about which style was better.Then they both silenced waiting for something which was to be astonishing and colossal .
    Out of know where , suddenly appeared a gigantic bright ball which was hanging down from the pitch black night sky .My dad than pulled out a continuous growing ladder.He than picked me up and i climbed the ladder .I was frightened as i had never been so high .
    A strong breeze lifted me of the ladder to a silver rocky ball.I than saw many star shaped balls scattered around the beautiful crystal white ball.Out of a sudden my family appeared to and they floated until they met the smooth surface which i stood on .
    In my disappointment ,they both started to fight with which cleaning equipment i should use.While they argued i just picked up a silver solid hammer which i hammered against a star.Then out of know where hovered thousands of gold shiny stars which all covered me.
    Eventually my father and grandfather stopped arguing and ran to my help.they couldn’t lift the stars so i decided i should lift them myself.Gripping hold onto the hammer ,i raged it up with all my might and strength until it went down and SMASH !!! They all flew in to the air and i was safe .
    My dad and my grandpa were astonished and were amazed with me and they never ever argued again !!!

    Silver
    First me,my son and his granddad were going on a boat because we were going to our job. Me and his granddad were wearing a hat so I gave my son my hat then when his granddad saw he gave his hat to wear so we kept fighting which was embracing especially on front of my son. finally we finished fighting so we stared to broom we played we started to fight again. Finally we stopped fighting and we saw something it was so bright we sent my son first and then we went following him. When we were at the top we were so surprised to be standing on a bunch of stars

  21. The first thing that had happened to me was that my grand farther and my farther were on a boat. Then my grand farther popped a present out the bag I opened it up and there was hat in it and I put it on. The most thing that annoyed me the most was that they both kept changing how put the hat on and on but just then I got tired of it so I put it on the way I wanted then they stopped. I started going up on the ladder finally I reached the top and broke the most shimmering star to be seen.

  22. Me and my father grandfather was fishing in the middle of the night. Then my grandfather gave me a present and I put on my hat on then my grandfather put up then my dad put it down then my grandfather put it back up then my father put it back down and make me sat by my grandfather. My grandfather put his hand up then down. My grandfather turn the light off. My father and my grandfather were angry at each other.I was confused at father and my grandfather.Then the sun started to rise up it was morning.the dad wanted his son to go to the sun he gave me a thing and he put the ladder on the sun

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      I was going to put the thing in the water but grandfather said no.but he tell me go to the sun. And if start climbing there.his dad wanted to go first.I tie my self in the thing

  23. BRONZE!!!!:

    One calm night my dad, my grandad and me went in our small rowing boat and rowed out to sea, I don’t know why but we did. All of a sudden dad stopped rowing and grandad pulled out a medium sized package he told me to open it. When I opened it I couldn’t believe my eyes it was a cap that was exactly like grandad’s and dad’s. I instantly put it on my head. Dad and grandad started arguing over which way I should wear my hat: over my eyes or pulled back showing some of my hair. Eventually dad picked me up and made my hat like his and ended the argument. They just sat there after that. Then dad itched his moustache so I itched the place where my moustache would grow and grandad put his finger in his ear wiggling it around so I did the same. Suddenly dad opened up a hatch that was in the bottom of our boat (inside it) and pulled out a COLOSSAL ladder and a small anchor. I was about to put the anchor in the sea when grandad told me to tie it to my back so I did. Dad told me to climb up the ladder, so I nervously began to climb up it. I looked down at grandad and he encouraged me to climb on. When I reached the top I magically floated upwards and landed on the moon. It was covered in stars that literally glowed. I was just about to go and explore when dad yelled up and told me to attach the anchor to something (he was holding the anchor’s rope) so I hooked it on to a crater filled with stars. Eventually dad and grandad came onto the moon as well. Grandad just stood still once on the moon but dad made his way to a little shed and pulled out a barrel full of brushes, brooms, rakes and tools. He took out a long brush with rather sharp bristles and grandad walked over he pulled out a broom that was shaped like a mop. I was just about to reach in the bucket and pull out a rake but dad showed me how to use his brush and handed it to me. Then grandad showed me how to use his broom and handed it to me. They started arguing again but this time about which tool I should use. As they were arguing I realised how much dad’s brush looked like his moustache and how much grandad’s broom looked like his beard.I giggled, just at that moment a gigantic star hit the moon, dad and grandad stopped arguing they started trying to shift the star. They tried using a spade but it snapped as well as some other tools. I touched the star and it made a noise, parts of it glowed orange then stopped. I ran over to the bucket, grabbed a hammer, twisted round my hat like a catcher (baseball) has it and began to climb up on the star. When I reached the top dad and grandad looked up at me as I hit the top of the star with a hammer. It turned into lots of more regular stars that fell into a small pile on top of me. I popped up from the pile and giggled again. After I walked out of the pile I grabbed a rake and started to shift some of the stars. Dad and grandad started helping too. After a few minutes had passed we had finished. So we climbed down the ladder, put it down and pulled down the anchor. Before we went home we took five minutes to admire our work. END!

  24. Bronze challenge:
    As me my grandfather and my dad sailed across the sapphire blue sea ,My grandfather placed a chocolate brown hat on my head .Later on my father changed the direction of the creative hat.As my dad was doing this my grandfather moved my hat.They both started to argue about which style was better.Then they both silenced waiting for something which was to be astonishing and colossal .

    Out of know where , suddenly appeared a gigantic bright ball which was hanging down from the pitch black night sky .My dad than pulled out a continuous growing ladder.He than picked me up and i climbed the ladder .I was frightened as i had never been so high .

    A strong breeze lifted me of the ladder to a silver rocky ball.I than saw many star shaped balls scattered around the beautiful crystal white ball.Out of a sudden my family appeared to and they floated until they met the smooth surface which i stood on .

    In my disappointment ,they both started to fight with which cleaning equipment i should use.While they argued i just picked up a silver solid hammer which i hammered against a star.Then out of know where hovered thousands of gold shiny stars which all covered me.

    Eventually my father and grandfather stopped arguing and ran to my help.they couldn’t lift the stars so i decided i should lift them myself.Gripping hold onto the hammer ,i raged it up with all my might and strength until it went down and SMASH !!! They all flew in to the air and i was safe .

    My dad and my grandpa were astonished and were amazed with me and they never ever argued again !!!

  25. Continue…
    There was ancient, timbered shed which was full of wooden brushes in a metalic barrow.My dad pulled the barrow and gave me a brush.A few moment later my grandfather came and said”Use the brush this way”
    “No use the brush way” my dad insisted.
    While they argued, I noticed that the brushes matched my dad’s moustache and my grandfather’s beard.I took a little giggle.When all of sudden a vast star smashed into the luminous ball.Everyone ran as fast as their leg would carry them behind a small bump.Feeling frightened, I peeked and saw what had crashed.It was star standing as straight as soldier.
    “What is this?” my dad said thrilled.
    Finding all the brushes, my dad and grandfather tried to take out the star.
    “How do we take this out?” questioned my dad.
    “It is very hard” my grandfather said about to give up.
    But then I had a marvelous plan.I ran quickly to the metalic barrow and climbed in it.Trying to reach the hammer, I pushed a little forward.Clutching the hammer, I climbed the star carefully.My dad and grandfather stopped speaking and stared at me concernedly.Trying to be delicate, I felt the lustrous, smooth star.Pulling out my hammer, I cracked the star in a delicate way until small, insignificant stars dashed to the floor.My family gazed and opening their eyes in shock.I fell down to the ground when my dad shouted”No!!”
    They thought I was injured or harmed. I found my way out and everyone laughed in relive.For a few hours, we sweeped and brushed the stars with peace.After a while it was time to go, my dad pulled the ship anchor.

  26. Continue…
    There was ancient, timbered shed which was full of wooden brushes in a metalic barrow.My dad pulled the barrow and gave me a brush.A few moment later my grandfather came and said”

  27. Bronze:
    I was riding the wooden, ancient boat when my grandfather gave me a present wrapped in a violet cloth.As I unwrapped the cloth a big smile swept across my red cheeks.I opened my present with great joy and delight.It was a brown, colourless hat which was worn by my dad and grandfather. After a few minutes, I felt irritated and heated because my dad and grandfather were too busy deciding which style I should wear the hat.Suddenly a bright, luminous rock flickered in the dark, grey sky.Everyone gazed, shocked and thrilled.I couldn’t believe it.Then my father pulled an extremely long ladder which led up to the bright ball.Feeling brave and curious I climbed the long, timbered ladder.While I was climbing, a dominant force pushed me towards the intense ball.It was gravity!Staring at the ball I saw that there was hundreds of stars coating the colossal, rough rock.
    “Hey, hook the ship anchor!” shouted my dad loudly.
    Suddenly a gold, blazing light shot through the dim sky as fast as cheetah.It was a shooting star!!!
    “Hey!” my dad exclaimed.
    There was no time looking at the shooting star, I had to listen to my father.
    (I will continue…)

  28. Silver
    As me,My father and my son rocked gently on the cruising ferry(la Luna);my father brought out a hat for my little son.But you see the problem was that my son wouldn’t put on his hat on properly,which really frustrated my father and me.We gazed at the beautiful moon in the night sky.Suddenly,my father pulled out a humungous ladder,he beckoned my son to go up first.My son hesitated for a few seconds while he was going up the ladder.

    Me and my father followed him and introduced ourselves to a beautiful paradise covered in a solid series of hard rock shaped like stars. we all swept away the stars into a massive solid pile of the solids. For a minute I gazed at the beautiful pile of stars, but then suddenly my son when on top of a humongous star frightening me and my father! I quickly beckoned for my son to come down from the humongous star, he got out a humongous hammer. He smashed it into 1 million pieces!!!!! I stared and looked at the Paradise standing in front of me.

    I reckon I will never see something is beautiful that again. But who knows my son is always full of surprises!

    The end.!!!

  29. BRONZE
    I feel really happy because I like it so much but my dad and my old granddad keep shouting with each other I really don’t like it it makes me sad. we was going to collet some
    stars and I was really excited but it was weird.

    when I went to the moon and it was so beautiful I loked around at the stars and it was so pretty.

  30. As my son , grandson and I went to catch the stars . I was trying to fix his hat when my son kept on doing it wrong so I got very cross. Then the sun risked into a bright yellow ball which stunned us all away . We made my grandson go first because my of my back so I went last .

    To see my grandson face light up like he did it was finominal

  31. as me my father and grandfather slowly went down the sea.
    i received the dull flap sailors had slept on me so i had messy black hair. both my father and grandfather kept deciding which style so they were fighting with each other until we all saw the beautiful moon so they went to it and clen up the stars and in the end the stars. ;)

  32. Silver

    First me,my son and his granddad were going on a boat because we were going to our job. Me and his granddad were wearing a hat so I gave my son my hat then when his granddad saw he gave his hat to wear so we kept fighting which was embracing especially on front of my son. finally we finished fighting so we stared to broom we played we started to fight again. Finally we stopped fighting and we saw something it was so bright we sent my son first and then we went following him. When we were at the top we were so surprised to be standing on a bunch of stars

  33. I was curious about were my dad and grandpa went each and every night but one night they took me with them.
    We were on a small boat in the middle of the deep blue sea and My grandpa gave me a archon and I was about to throw it in the sea.
    Just then my dad pulled a long ladder out of the wooden chest in the boat ,it stretch for miles and miles all the way up to the moon. He lent it against the ship and my dad said “climb it son.” I hesitated but they both insisted. So I started to climb the long ladder. It seem to take for ever and when I got to the top I started to float up onto the moon, then I saw a bright shooting star it landed on the planet I ran over to it and I touched it the bright, golden star.
    Meanwhile .My dad and grandpa started to argue over which bush I should use.Then the planet started to shake and ZOOMING! Across the sky was a bright light my grandad and dad stopped arguing and they grabbed me an ran we hide behind a gap in between the planet. we all looked and saw the most enormous star I had ever seen. My dad and grandpa started to argue again over the tools then I had a idea. While they argued I ran towards the large star with a hammer. I started to climb the enormous star. once I climb all the way to the top, I gently rubbed the star and it made a little ping sound just like the tiniest mouse squeak. Then tapped the top with my hammer, it burst into thousands of tiny stars and they crashed to the ground.
    My dad and grandpa thought a was injured but when I pop out from underneath the pile of stars they were relived. They didn’t seem to argue again for the rest of the night as we began work again cleaning up the moon.

  34. BRONZE!!
    The Little Boy Is Going Somewhere With His Dad Or GranDad.

    At The Middle Of The Video They Row A Boat And Have Fun .The Boy And His Dad And His GranDad Find Sometihng And See What It Is.

    It Was A …… STAR!! They Wanted It So They Got A Brown Ladder So They Could Get The Star. So The Boy Went OnTo The Ladder And Went To Get The Star.
    EVENTALLY ,They Got It And Was Very Happy.So They All Went Home And Lived Happoly Ever After :)
    The End Of My Re-Recount! :D

  35. Bronze
    At first I wanted it to be exciting and amazing but then my grandfather and father fought over which side my hat would be which was crazy and weird but then we went up the huge moon and we saw a million of stars so we had to clean them of the moon which was awesome and then my father had a broom and my grandfather had a leaf cleaner so when we finished my dad and grandfather touch my head and they both were happy.

    Silver
    Can you believe my dad he is so annoying but he did Help us which was very good and he was being very helpful and I just realised that he is a awesome person and i felt so happy when we all swept everything but it was only the stars.
    Gold
    Today me and my son and my grandson and we all had to sweep all the stars off the moon and we well it was actually me and my son fought over who put the good side of the hat but at the end we are all happy.

  36. Continued from previous post.
    . I saw the bright,golden stars that layed on the rocky,COLSAL moon. I wondered what was going on being on the moon this would be the best experience ever. Then I heard the call from my father, it looked like they where upside down. ZOOOOOOM. A shooting Star landed on the moon it shined ulnimating the others stars lack of brightness. I wondered what it was. It sounded like it was speaking to me I slowly walked up to it I half- cowardly touched the star and it shined again. All of a sudden my father and grandfather came aboard the moon. They both gave mo a choice of which broom to,choose I wondered my they couldn’t use the same one. As they argued about he brooms I soon realised they use the same one that match there breads. Suddenly an other zooming star ZOOOOMED towards us we quickly ran into one of the holes to protect our selves. After a few terrifying moments we came out of hiding and to our on eyes we saw a HUMENGOUS star that glistened in the darkness. My farther and grandfather tried there best to remove the star ( my farther the most) but it wouldn’t move. Ding! a voice spoke in my head the star was speaking to me again I walked to it and gave it a little tap, like the last star it glowed again. Then I had a great idea I turned my hat the other way being brave I released I don’t have to be like them I can do things my own way. I took a small hammer from the bucket and bravely climbed on the monumental star I listened to what it said to me and it gave me advice to resolve my problem I gave the star a little knock on with the hammer and bang, other little stars where contained in the monumental star. They gracefully fell onto the ground and for the first time I saw both my farther and grandfathers eyes to see the amazing stars clatter. Me of all people admired the stars as I fell with them. My farther and grandfather where so proud of me that they got along and just swept the stars. Finally we had finished and we got back onto the land and admired the moon as it was at it’s quarter phase. 🎆🎆🎇🌠

    The end

  37. Bronze Challenge
    As me,my father and my grandfather slowly went down the sea. I received the dull, flap sailors hat that slept on my messy,black hair. Both my father and grandfather kept deciding on which style to wear it my grandfather likes the point peaking up howeve my farther likes it going straight.

    Then we waited and waited till we saw, the bright, COLASAL moon that glisned on the thick , blue water. Then my father pulled out a very, very, very long ladder tha led right up to it. However I had to carry the heavy, meatal anchor which layed on my weak hunched back. I climbed the long ladder and when I reached the top the force lifted me, I didn’t know what was happening I was scared and a little excited. Then I fell right on my back. I stared at where I was and I had never seen such beauty.

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