Year Three Literacy Homework – Week 3

Year Three are now coming to the end of their setting descriptions unit in Literacy. On Monday, they will be writing their final piece!

Below, you will find a setting description written by one of our very own Year 3 superstars! Have a read of their work, then use your peer assessment skills to evaluate this piece of writing. Can you take any ideas from this piece for your own writing?

Big Ben shone brightly in the light blue sky. The wheel was as colourful as a rainbow, and it goes around slowly like a tortoise. The wheel was as lanky as a giraffe. I could smell food from delicious restaurants. The bridge is above the water, and it is long like the Great Wall of China.

  1. Name two adjectives the writer has used in their writing.
  2. Which simile do you prefer and why? Think about the effect on the reader!
  3. How could the writer improve in their writing? Think of one suggestion.
  4. What do you imagine London to look like as you read this?
  5. Which ideas will you use in your own writing?

This homework needs to be completed by Thursday 8th October please children. I look forward to reading your responses!

 

18 thoughts on “Year Three Literacy Homework – Week 3

  1. 1 As colourful as a rainbow
    2 Big ben shone brightly
    3 use better pronouns
    4 has beutyful eye sparkles
    5 I want to know what London look’s like

  2. 1. the wheel was as colourful as a rainbow
    2. big ben shone brightly
    3. imagine london looks wonderful
    4. i could change it was as long as the great wall of china

  3. 1.brighty, blue. 2.The wheel was as colours as a rainbow. 3. More prepositions. 4. That it has delicous restaurants. 5. I would use sentence openers.

  4. 1. Brightly and slowly
    2.I like as slowly like a tortoise because it is describing exactly how fast it’s going around.
    3.I think as lanky as a giraffe could be better as, as tall as a skyscraper.
    4. I think London looks bright and colourful.
    5.I would use long like the Great Wall of China because it sounds good.

  5. 1] Lanky and delicious
    2] The bridge is long like the great wall of china. This makes me imagine that the bridge is very big like the great wall of China.
    3]The writer can use more adjectives.
    4]I imagine that London is an exiting and adventurous place.
    5]I would use compound sentences.

  6. 1.)brightly and lanky

    2.)like

    3.)better adjectives and sentences openers

    4.)it is beautiful and coulurful

    5.)adjectives and punctuation

  7. 1).Brightly and colourful.
    2).The wheel was as colourful as rainbow.
    3).It needs more commas.
    4).It would be terrific.
    5).Big ben shone brightly.

  8. 1. brightly colorful.
    2.I prefer this sentence:The wheel was as colorful as a rainbow.
    because it sounds like people are looking at it and they cant stop.
    3.By using more powerful words.
    4.handsome,smooth the word colossal tells me that big Ben is big.
    5.The weal was as colorful as a rainbow and it is long like the Great Wall of China.:)

  9. 1.LANKY AND DELICIOUS
    2. THE WHEEL WAS AS COLURFUL AS A RAINBOW.BECAUSE I GOT GOOD ADJECTIVES WHEN YOUR READING THIS.
    3. I WOULD SUGGEST THAT THEY SHOULD CARRY ON WRITING BECAUSE IT’S INTERESTING.
    4.HUGE,BRIGHT
    5.SIMILIES AND CONJUNCTIONS

  10. 1.LANKY AND DELICIOUUS
    2. THE WHEEL WAS AS COLURFUL AS A RAINBOW.BECAUSE I GOT GOOD ADJECTIVES WHEN YOUR READING THIS.
    3. I WOUL’D SUGGEST THAT THEY SHOULD PUT MORE

  11. 1.Brightly,lanky
    2.I liked the simile as slow as a tortoise because it
    describes how slow the wheel goes.
    3.They could have use more elaborate adjectives.
    4.From the description London sounds adventurous and exciting.
    5.I will make sure my writing is descriptive.

  12. 1.lanky light
    2.Big Ben shone in the light blue sky
    3.use better connectives
    4.wonderful and pretty,joyful,magical
    5.lanky and colorful,long,restaurants

  13. 1, colourful, tortoise
    2,like a tortoise because it describes how slow the wheel goes.
    3,The wheel was tall as a giraffe
    4, Its bright and sunny, busy and a nice place to visit.
    5, The big ben was bright like a diamond.

  14. 1 blue brightly
    2 I could change it was as long as the great wall of China to it was as long as a snake
    3 use more powerful adjectives
    4 I imagine London looks wonderful
    5 big Ben shone brightly.

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